A few small changes: uncapitalizing an instance of "psionic", capitalizing reference to another CT, and a small grammar correction.
A couple of minor suggestions for para. 4- these are just alternate word choices and do not need to be changed: "Supplemental energy requirements and complexity of the psionic transceiver are the primary reasons for the significant construction cost of
the Neural Shielding Facility. At the same time, the delicate technology involved requires constant upkeep
, resulting in high maintenance costs. "
In any case, the text below gets my clean bill of health.
Neural Shielding Facility
X-Net://Pegasus.net/Base Facilities/Neural Shielding Facility
With recent advances in psionic technology, a vast array of new applications is becoming available. The latest of these is the Neural Shielding Facility, designed in response to the frightening realization that Aliens may possess the ability to pinpoint the location of our bases by thought patterns alone.
Contemporary investigation in the field of psionics has uncovered the sophistication of the Aliens' methods: to a degree, they appear to be able to determine the content of human thought patterns over a distance of a few hundred kilometers. X-Corps bases, even with relatively few people, can be detected, perhaps through some typical brain-waves involuntarily induced by X-Corps basic training, or by the fact that all personnel exude defiance towards the Alien incursion instead of the usual terror exhibited by civilian populations. After identifying this gaping hole in X-Corps base security, we re-examined our previous research into Psionic Theory for a technique to mask these waves.
The newly developed Neural Shielding Facility harnesses a large array of subunits containing the same special enzymes found in the Psionic Amplifier to establish a cancellation grid. Although it does not block brain-waves entirely, as the name implies, it dampens them through destructive interference. This facility consists of two large circular elements coupled to a supercomputer utilizing a network of highly specialized surface acoustic wave chips. The lower component is a sensory array which receives the psionic waves propagating from within its detection limit. After analysis, the upper part subsequently emits a cancelling waveform, greatly reducing the original signal's amplitude. Due to its enormous power consumption, the facility is equipped with an energy system located in the lower floor of the module. According to our calculations, masking the Psionic footprint of our bases should significantly decrease the probability of detection by enemy forces.
Supplemental energy requirements and complexity of the psionic transceiver are the primary reasons for the significant cost of building the Neural Shielding Facility. At the same time, the delicate technology involved requires constant technical service, resulting in high maintenance costs. The tactical advantage of secrecy cannot be taken lightly as remaining concealed from Alien forces reduces the likelihood of costly base attacks. Due to the enormous energy and maintenance costs, building more than one shielding facility would not be cost efficient. In addition, there would be no appreciable change in the machine's overall effectiveness.
"This device, when activated, reduces the apparent brainwave output of a fully staffed X-Corps base to that of a typical politician."
-from "Neural Shielding Facility Operating Manual"
Hm, maybe there's one thing more that might be addressed. If the player has made it this far into the game without the Aliens finding a base, maybe suggest that recent appearance of larger, better UFOs that presumably have greater psi detection abilities pose a growing threat to X-Corps security? I don't know if this is true or not, though.
Edited by Astyanax, 30 September 2006 - 08:21 AM.