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Hey there
This is my first attempt at a CT, and I decided to choose something relatively simple: Alien Retaliation

Heres my first draft...be warned it didnt take a heck of alot of my time...I was thinking about it while I was supposed to be doing my exams...
Ok here we go:

Alien Retaliation

If X-Corp fighters have been especially successful in shooting down UFOs, the Aliens may mount a Retaliatory strike against X-Corp. The deadliest form this retaliation takes is a direct assault on the X-Corp base deemed responsible for the losses, leaving minimal evacuation time and pushing the defenders into a last stand, with no chance of escape.
It is believed that only Very Large UFOs will directly attack an X-Corp base, meaning that it has a significant chance of landing without taking critical damage from X-Corp defences, before unleashing a tide of Alien invaders through the bases main entrances.
However, the Aliens must locate the base, which will require several UFOs scouting the approximate area. If the UFOs can be kept away from the base, the chances of discovery should be minimal.
This type of Alien activity, although rare, poses the single greatest threat to X-Corp’s personnel, property and in extreme cases, survival.


Something I thought of while typing this:

“We had no idea what “Retaliation” meant, all we knew was that bastard was heading straight for us…we soon found out when the hangar doors exploded…”

Now if only I could find a way to make that fit..

Of course, anyone got any moans, gripes or general suggestions?
I really wanna hear them
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No complaints? Cmon, cant let me get complacent..

Im gonna rework this an post a second version, this time itll be planned out and should look better...

Btw, does using the 3rd person (X-Corp) sound better than using the 1st person ("Our" ships ect)..I kinda want to know so I can do another version of it....
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[i]appologies to all, i have been out of it for week and have had to spend a day reading the whole forum to find out what the heck happened with the whole active, done, unsorted, thingy.[/i]

Right then:

Got amount to work with but quite short, need expansion and depth:


Alien Retaliation

Agressive alien activity occurs in many forms. Agressive alien ground tactics, return fire from UFO's and terror incidents all include aspects of agrevated response to X-corp intervention. However this form of retaliation is mainly reactionary; responding to the immeadiate threat without planning or forethought.

The tactic of Alien Retaliation on the other hand is a is a calculated and specific response to X-corp. In a Retaliation mission the aliens will bring the fight to X-corp. That the aliens might risk an all out assault on X-corps is the strongest indication that our interference in alien activities is having a more profound effect than we realise.

Alien Retaliation means exactly what it says. If X-Corp agents have been especially successful in shooting down UFOs and conducting missions, the Aliens may mount a retaliatory strike against X-Corp. The deadliest form this retaliation takes is a direct assault on the X-Corp base deemed responsible for the losses.

Such a strike is often highly planned and orchastrated for maximum suprise and effect, leaving minimal evacuation time. The alien's objective is simple. To exterminate every last man in the base or to raise it to the ground trying. Any ground assault force sent to directly attck an X-corp base is likely to be large and elite; the Aliens will not take half measures once the decision to attack has been made.

We have made some preliminary calculations regarding the likely size of a successful alien assault. If the aliens have come to the same conclusions, they will only send only Very Large UFO's to attempt retaliation missions.

Unfortunalty this means that the Retaliation Mission will be near impossible to intercept and will have a significant chance of landing without taking critical damage from X-Corp defences. Having successfuly evaded the base's perimeter defenses, it will then procceed to unleashing a tide of Alien invaders through the bases main entrances; most likely the Hangers and main access elevators. Teams appointed as base defence personel should expect fierce, brutal close quarter fighting, with every possibility of a last stand and no chance of escape.

Flight is not an option, nor is scaling back our activities to try to avoid attracting attention. The only effective defense therefore may be evasion and concealment. To attack X-corps the Aliens must first locate the base, which will require several UFOs scouting the approximate area. If the UFOs can be kept away from the base, the chances of discovery should be minimal. If they do attack then every effort must be made to prevent a Retaliation vessle from reaching an X-corp base, but at the end it may be down to the men and women of the Corps to fight for their very lives. This type of Alien activity, although rare, poses the single greatest threat to X-Corp’s personnel, property and in extreme cases, survival.
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I really like what you've got, mostly comments dealing with phrasing.

[quote]Agressive alien activity occurs in many forms. Agressive alien ground tactics, return fire from UFO's and terror incidents all include aspects of agrevated response to X-corp intervention.  However this form of retaliation is mainly reactionary; responding to the immeadiate threat without planning or forethought.

The tactic of Alien Retaliation on the other hand is a is a calculated and specific response to X-corp. In a Retaliation mission the aliens will bring the fight to X-corp. That the aliens might risk an all out assault on X-corps is the strongest indication that our interference in alien activities is having a more profound effect than we realise. [/quote]

It might sound alittle less wordy and redundent if it was phrased something like:

Aggressive alien activity occurs in many forms. Aggressive alien ground tactics, return fire from UFO's and terror incidents all include aspects of aggravated response to X-corps intervention. The most serious of these maneuvers directly threatens the X-corps facilities vital to the defense of earth. That the aliens might risk an all out retaliatory assault on X-corps is the strongest indication that our interference in alien activities is having a more profound effect than we realize.

This paragraph looks little small compaired to the others:

[quote]We have made some preliminary calculations regarding the likely size of a successful alien assault. If the aliens have come to the same conclusions, they will only send only Very Large UFO's to attempt retaliation missions.[/quote]

Lengthened passage:

We have made some preliminary calculations regarding the likely size of a successful alien assault on an X-corps base of operations. Given the heavily entrenched, subterranean nature of essential X-corps facilities a high alien casualty rate should be expected due to their unfamiliarity with the battleground and the stalwart defense of our fine troops. Even a small contingent of X-corps best could cause disproportionate alien casualties to their numbers due to a combination of “hit and run” tactics and their superior knowledge of the facility. If the aliens have come to the same conclusions, they will only send only Very Large UFO's to attempt retaliation missions.

Well, just those two now. I hope that helps with the cause,
-NT
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While I do believe that we should elaborate on just [i]why[/i] the aliens opt to send primarily large UFOs after us during a base raid, perhaps that whole bit about the defenses and whatnot is a bit too expansive. Perhaps something like
"It appears that the aliens know to anticipate a direct defensive effort from an entrenched X-Corps base of operations, and therefore primarily resort to their largest, most combat-ready vessels to carry out such a drastic attack."
I believe something a bit more ambiguous about just what exact kind of craft they'd use would make the entry sound a lot less predictable (ie, videogame-ish)

I don't know--just thought I'd add that bit. Overall, a great submission. Edited by The Master Maniac
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Bumpity/slashity/takety/steality/mineity

MOOOHAHAHAHAHA

so, should i restart the entire text from scratch or try and use the previous conversations for this, or is this a duplicate entry
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ALIEN RETALIATION
X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Research/Alien Retaliation

Aggressive Alien activity occurs in many forms. Offensive ground tactics, return fire from UFO's and terror incidents all include aspects of agrevated response to X-Corps intervention. However this form of retaliation is mainly reactionary; responding to the immediate threat without further planning or forethought.

The tactic of Alien Retaliation on the other hand is a calculated and specific response to X-corps. In a Retaliation mission the Aliens will bring the fight to X-corps. The fact that Aliens might risk a to-death assault on X-corps is a hard fact which suggests that our interference in Alien activities is having a more profound effect than we currently realise.

Alien Retaliation means exactly what it says. If X-Corps agents have been especially successful in shooting down UFOs and conducting missions, the Aliens may mount a retaliatory strike against X-Corps. The deadliest form this retaliation takes is a direct assault on the X-Corps base deemed responsible for the losses.

Such a strike is often highly planned and orchestrated for maximum surprise and effect, leaving minimal evacuation time. The Alien's objective is simple. To exterminate every last man in the base or to raise it to the ground trying. Any ground assault force sent to directly attack an X-corps base is likely to be large and elite; the Aliens will not take half measures once the decision to attack has been made.

We have made some preliminary calculations regarding the likely size of a successful Alien assault. If Aliens have come to the same conclusion, they will send only large UFO's to attempt retaliation missions.

Unfortunately, this means that the Retaliation Mission will be near impossible to intercept and will have a significant chance of landing without taking critical damage from X-Corps defences. Having successfully evaded the base's perimeter defences, it will then unleash a tide of Alien invaders through the base’s Landing Pads and Base Access Facilities. Teams appointed as base defence personel should expect fierce, brutal close quarter fighting, with every possibility of a last stand and no chance of escape.

Flight is not an option, nor is scaling back our activities to try to avoid attracting attention. The only effective defense therefore may be evasion and concealment. To attack X-corps the Aliens must first locate the base, which will require several UFOs scouting the approximate area. If the UFOs can be kept away from the base, the chances of discovery should be minimal. If they do attack then every effort must be made to prevent a Retaliation vessel from reaching an X-Corps base, but at the end it may be down to the men and women of the Corps to fight for their very lives. This type of Alien activity, although rare, poses the single greatest threat to X-Corps’ personnel and property - and in extreme cases, its own survival.
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Then you should have just worked on it instead of warning us you would in a near future :P
Anyway, let's get to it :)
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[quote]ALIEN RETALIATION
X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Research/Alien Retaliation

Aggressive Alien activity occurs in many forms.  Offensive ground tactics, return fire from UFO's and terror incidents all include aspects of agrevated response to [color="blue"]X-Corps[/color] intervention. However this form of retaliation is mainly reactionary; responding to the immediate threat without further planning or forethought.[/quote]
Terror attacks are not aggravated responses to [color="blue"]X-Corps[/color] intervention, they are part of the Aliens' strategy, not that it should be brought in this text, but don't include them as a sort of counter-attack.

[quote]The tactic of Alien Retaliation on the other hand is a calculated and specific response to [color="blue"]X-corps[/color]. In a Retaliation mission the Aliens will bring the fight to [color="blue"]X-corps[/color]. The fact that Aliens might risk a to-death assault on [color="blue"]X-corps[/color] is a hard fact which suggests that our interference in Alien activities is having a more profound effect than we currently realise.[/quote]

[quote]Alien Retaliation means exactly what it says. If X-Corps agents have been especially successful in shooting down UFOs and conducting missions, the Aliens may mount a retaliatory strike against X-Corps. The deadliest form this retaliation takes is a direct assault on the X-Corps base deemed responsible for the losses.[/quote]
I believe this paragraph should suit best before the second, as it's defining what Alien Retaliation is, while the second is about it; they are very similar, maybe you could merge them into one single paragraph?

[quote]Such a strike is often highly planned and orchestrated for maximum surprise and effect, leaving minimal evacuation time. The Alien's objective is simple. To exterminate every last man in the base or to raise it to the ground trying. Any ground assault force sent to directly attack an [color="blue"]X-corps[/color] base is likely to be large and elite; the Aliens will not take half measures once the decision to attack has been made.[/quote]
Alien attacks are always highly planned :)
"raise it to the ground" :laugh:, I like it.

[quote]We have made some preliminary calculations regarding the likely size of a successful Alien assault. If Aliens have come to the same conclusion, they will send only large UFO's to attempt retaliation missions.[/quote]
Is this a fact on X-Com? only Large UFOs attack bases? at any rate, check the new name for Large UFO, I believe it was Escort.

[quote]Unfortunately, this means that the Retaliation Mission will be near impossible to intercept and will have a significant chance of landing without taking critical damage from [color="blue"]X-Corps[/color] defences. Having successfully evaded the base's perimeter defences, it will then unleash a tide of Alien invaders through the base’s Landing Pads and Base Access Facilities. Teams appointed as base defence personel should expect fierce, brutal close quarter fighting, with every possibility of a last stand and no chance of escape.[/quote]
I managed to intercept a good amount of Retaliation ships, I suggest you change "near impossible" to "very hard" or something like it, say that the base won't have a lot of time to react, but not precisely impossible.

[quote]Flight is not an option, nor is scaling back our activities to try to avoid attracting attention. The only effective defense therefore may be evasion and concealment. To attack [color="blue"]X-corps[/color] the Aliens must first locate the base, which will require several UFOs scouting the approximate area. If the UFOs can be kept away from the base, the chances of discovery should be minimal. If they do attack then every effort must be made to prevent a Retaliation vessel from reaching an [color="blue"]X-Corps[/color] base, but at the end it may be down to the men and women of the [color="blue"]Corps[/color] to fight for their very lives. This type of Alien activity, although rare, poses the single greatest threat to X-Corps’ personnel and property - and in extreme cases, its own survival.[/quote]
IIRC, if you launched ships to intercept an UFO which was near your base, that could be detected, the launching of ships when UFOs are near to detect them, should you mention that?
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ALIEN RETALIATION
X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Research/Alien Retaliation

Aggressive Alien activity occurs in many forms. Offensive ground tactics, returned fire from UFO's and terror incidents, all include aspects of aggravated response to X-Corps intervention. However, this form of retaliation is mainly reactionary, responding to the immediate threat without further planning or forethought.

Alien Retaliation means exactly what it says. If X-Corps agents have been especially successful in shooting down UFOs and conducting missions, the Aliens may mount a retaliatory strike against X-Corps. The deadliest form this retaliation takes is a direct assault on the X-Corps base deemed responsible for the losses. The tactic behind Alien Retaliation is a planned and well-thought response to X-corps past activity. In a Retaliation mission, the Aliens will bring the fight to X-corps. The fact that Aliens might risk a to-death assault on X-corps is hard evidence that our interference in Alien activities is having a more profound effect than we currently realize.

Such a strike is often highly planned and orchestrated for maximum surprise and effect, leaving minimal evacuation time. The Alien's objective is simple. To exterminate every man in the base or to raise it to the ground trying. Any ground assault force sent to directly attack an X-corps base is likely to be large and elite; the Aliens will not take half measures once the decision to attack has been made.

We have made some preliminary calculations regarding the likely size of a successful Alien assault. If Aliens have come to the same conclusion, only the largest of UFOs are to attempt such missions.

Unfortunately, this means that vessels on Retaliation Missions will be hard to intercept due to the limited time available to attack. Thus, they will have a significant chance of landing without taking critical damage from X-Corps defenses. Having successfully evaded the base's perimeter defenses, it will then unleash a tide of Alien invaders through the base’s Landing Pads and Base Access Facilities. Teams appointed as base defense personnel should expect fierce, brutal close quarter fighting, with every possibility of a last stand and no chance of escape.

Endless fighting is not an option, nor is scaling back our activities, desperately trying to avoid attracting attention. The only effective defense therefore may be evasion and concealment. To attack X-corps the Aliens must first locate the base, which will require several UFOs scouting the approximate area. If the UFOs can be kept away from the base, the chances of discovery should be minimal. In addition, our bases should keep their activity levels to a minimum whenever Alien vessels are near in order to minimize the chance of being detected. If they decide to attack, then every effort must be made to prevent a Retaliation vessel from reaching an X-Corps base, but in the end, it may be down to the men and women of the Corps to fight for their very lives. This type of Alien activity, although rare, poses the single greatest threat to X-Corps’ personnel and property - and in extreme cases, its own survival.

“Why don’t we destroy the Landing Pad and booby-trap the Base Access Facility?”
“Because we will be trapped in here forever!”
“Really?! You mean there are no emergency exits to the highway?”
“…Stop the morning one; it damages your brain cells!”
- Conversation between rookies
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[quote]...brutal close quarter fighting, [color="red"]with every possibility of a last stand[/color] and no chance of escape.[/quote]
i dont understand what you mean here, a last stand isnt a possible outcome, its a choice that will hopefully effect the outcome.

[quote]Endless fighting is not an option, nor is scaling back our activities...[/quote]
hmmm, can you think of another way to write this... dont like refering to endless figthing as a option(even one that isnt option^^)
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[quote][quote]...brutal close quarter fighting, [color="red"]with every possibility of a last stand[/color] and no chance of escape.[/quote]
i dont understand what you mean here, a last stand isnt a possible outcome, its a choice that will hopefully effect the outcome.
[/quote]Well, Ask MagicAndy, it was in his draft.
He means that soldiers defending the base will definitely have a difficult fight (brutal...fighting), and they may even have to fight "to the end" (until they all die "with...last stand").

In many First Person Shooters, there is a Multiplayer mode called "Last Man Standing". This means that the game is 1vsAll, and whoever dies, remains dead. The last and only who remains alive (who still stands) is the winner!
[quote][quote]Endless fighting is not an option, nor is scaling back our activities...[/quote]
hmmm, can you think of another way to write this... dont like refering to endless figthing as a option(even one that isnt option^^)
[/quote]Got something in mind?

The Aliens may be far too powerful for us to beat, we don't know it yet (by the time the player researches this CT). If that's the case, we will fight until we die, although our "bravery" doesn't permit such a surrender, so it is not an option.
I like the sound of it...
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ALIEN RETALIATION
X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Research/Alien Retaliation

Aggressive Alien activity occurs in [color="purple"]various forms, such as[/color] offensive ground tactics, returned fire from UFO's and terror incidents. All include aspects of aggravated response to X-Corps intervention. However, this form of [color="purple"]counterstrike[/color] is mainly reactionary, responding to the immediate threat without further planning or forethought.

Alien Retaliation is [color="purple"]a collection of special retaliatory strike tactics triggered by X-Corps' success in UFO interception and mission completion[/color]. [color="purple"]Its deadliest form[/color] is a direct assault on the X-Corps base deemed responsible for [color="purple"]previous losses[/color]. [color="purple"]Thus, Alien Retaliation is a planned and well-thought response where the fight is brought directly at X-Corps.[/color] The fact that Aliens might risk a deadly assault on the corporation is hard evidence that our interference in Alien activities has a more profound effect than we currently realize.

Such a strike is often highly planned and orchestrated for maximum surprise and effect, leaving minimal evacuation time. The Alien's objective is simple; to exterminate every man in the base or to raise it to the ground trying. Any ground assault force sent to directly attack an X-Corps base is likely to be large and elite; the Aliens will not take half measures once the decision to attack has been made.

We have made some preliminary calculations regarding the likely size of a successful Alien assault. If Aliens have come to the same conclusion, only the largest of UFOs are to attempt such missions.

Unfortunately, this means that vessels on Retaliation missions will be hard to intercept [color="purple"]due to their durability[/color] and limited time available to attack. Thus, they will have a significant chance of landing without taking critical damage from X-Corps defenses. Having successfully evaded the base's perimeter defenses, [color="purple"]a tide of Alien invaders will be unleashed through the base’s landing pads and base access facilities.[/color] Teams appointed as base defense personnel should expect fierce, brutal close quarter fighting,[color="purple"] with no chance of escape and the possibility of a last man standing.[/color]

[color="purple"]Scaling back our activities, desperately trying to avoid attracting attention, is not an option. Therefore, the only effective countermeasure is evasion and concealment.[/color] To attack X-Corps, the Aliens must first locate the base, which will require several UFOs scouting the approximate area. If the UFOs can be kept away from the base, the chances of discovery should [color="purple"]be kept to a minimum[/color]. In addition, our bases [color="purple"]should lower their activity levels whenever[/color] Alien vessels are near in order to minimize the chance of detection. If they decide to attack, then every effort must be made to prevent a Retaliation vessel from reaching the base. [color="purple"]In the end[/color], it will be down to the base's personnel to fight for their very lives. This type of Alien activity, although rare, poses the [s]single[/s] greatest threat to X-Corps’ personnel and property[color="purple"]; in extreme cases, even its own survival.[/color]

“Why don’t we destroy the Landing Pad and booby-trap the Base Access Facility?”
“Because we will be trapped in here forever!”
“Really?! You mean there are no emergency exits to the highway?”
“…Stop the morning one; it damages your brain cells!”
- Conversation between rookies
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ALIEN RETALIATION
X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Research/Alien Retaliation

Aggressive Alien activity occurs in various forms, such as offensive ground tactics, returned fire from UFO's and terror incidents [color="blue"]I think "attacks" is more appropiate than "incidents"[/color]. All include aspects of aggravated response to X-Corps intervention. However, this form of counterstrike is mainly reactionary, responding to the immediate threat without further planning or forethought.

Alien Retaliation is a collection of special retaliatory strike tactics triggered by X-Corps' success in UFO interception and mission completion [color="blue"]How about something like "triggered by X-Corps continued success in UFO interception and disruption of Alien activities" ? [/color]. Its deadliest form is a direct assault on the X-Corps base deemed responsible for previous losses [color="blue"]Alien Retaliation's *only* form is a direct assault, increased Alien Terror Sites or increased UFO flights are not considered a part of Alien Retaliation[/color]. Thus, Alien Retaliation [color="blue"]"Alien Retaliation" sounds a bit repetitive here, I'd suggest something like "Alien retaliation attacks..." (note that "retaliation" doesn't have caps) [/color]is a planned and well-thought [color="blue"]well-thought doesn't seem to be the right word here, maybe "...planned and carefully laid-out..."? [/color] response where the fight is brought [color="blue"] taken? [/color]directly at[color="blue"] to? [/color] X-Corps. The fact that Aliens might risk a deadly [color="blue"] direct? [/color]assault on the corporation [color="blue"] Corporation? where did that come from? [/color] is hard evidence that our interference in Alien activities has a more profound effect [color="blue"] how about "impact"? [/color] than we currently [color="blue"] suggest remove that "currently" [/color] realize.

Such a strike is often highly planned and orchestrated for maximum surprise and effect, leaving minimal evacuation time. [color="blue"] This sentence doesn't read very good, perhaps "Retaliation missions are performed with high precision, taking special care in maintaining the surprise element, which almost invariably proves to be most effective; in this case, the lack of time to properly prepare for the Alien attack leaves little to no time for any sort of evacuation" [/color] The Alien's [color="blue"] "Aliens' "[/color] objective is simple; to exterminate every man in the base or to raise it to the ground trying. Any ground assault force sent to directly attack an X-Corps base is likely to be large and elite; the Aliens will not take half measures once the decision to attack has been made.

We have made some preliminary calculations regarding the likely size of a successful Alien assault. If Aliens have come to the same conclusion, only the largest of UFOs are to attempt such missions. [color="blue"] Remember the player might get this entry *after* an Alien attack on his base, so the "preliminary" part might not make much sense if such attacks have happened more than once [/color]

Unfortunately, this means that vessels on Retaliation missions will be hard to intercept due to their durability [color="blue"] not sure what you mean by "durability" [/color] and limited time available to attack [color="blue"] this part doesn't read good either, how about "Unfortunately, this means that ships on retaliation missions will be difficult to intercept given their firepower, resistance, and given the fact that UFOs launched directly at our bases are likely to entry the atmosphere nearby these, giving us little time to launch an interception"[/color]. Thus, they will have a significant chance of landing without taking critical damage from X-Corps [color="blue"] Not "X-corps defenses", use "base defenses" instead [/color] defenses. Having successfully evaded the base's perimeter defenses [color="Blue"] "defenses" is repetitive [/color], a tide [color="blue"] wave? [/color]of Alien invaders will be unleashed through the base’s landing pads and base access facilities. Teams appointed as base defense personnel should expect fierce, [color="blue"] remove the comma and add an "and" [/color] brutal close quarter fighting, with no chance of escape and the possibility of a last man standing [color="blue"] this last part reads odd, the part of "possibility of a last man standing", I don't think "last man standing" is used correctly here [/color]

Scaling back our activities, desperately trying to avoid attracting attention, is not an option [color="blue"] yes, it's an option, the player may want to reduce interceptions or successful terror attacks while he rebuilds after several alien attacks to reduce the chance of retaliation missions against him[/color]. Therefore, the only effective countermeasure is evasion and concealment. To attack X-Corps, the Aliens must first locate the base, which will require several UFOs scouting the approximate area. If the UFOs can be kept away from the base, the chances of discovery should be kept to a minimum. In addition, our bases should lower their activity levels [color="blue"]specify what "activity levels" means in this context[/color] whenever Alien vessels are near in order to minimize the chance of detection. If they decide to attack, then every effort must be made to prevent a Retaliation vessel from reaching the base. In the end, it will be down to the base's personnel to fight for their very lives. This type of Alien activity, although rare, poses the single greatest threat to X-Corps’ personnel and property [color="blue"] bases instead of property, property sounds like it's talkign about the commander's personal beach house[/color]; in extreme cases, even its own survival.

“Why don’t we destroy the Landing Pad and booby-trap the Base Access Facility?”
“Because we will be trapped in here forever!”
“Really?! You mean there are no emergency exits to the highway?”
“…Stop the morning one; it damages your brain cells!”
- Conversation between rookies
[color="blue"] Not sure this fluff is right here...[/color]
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ALIEN RETALIATION
X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Research/Alien Retaliation

Aggressive Alien activity occurs in various forms, such as offensive ground tactics, returned fire from UFO's and terror [b]attacks[/b]. All include aspects of aggravated response to X-Corps intervention. However, this form of counterstrike is mainly reactionary, responding to the immediate threat without further planning or forethought.

Alien Retaliation is a collection of special retaliatory strike tactics [b]triggered by X-Corps continued success in UFO interception and disruption of Alien activities. Alien retaliation attacks are well-planned and efficiently deployed assaults[/b] where the fight is taken directly to X-Corps. The fact that Aliens might risk such an assault on the corporation is hard evidence that our interference in Alien activities has a more profound [b]impact than we realize.
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What does X-Corps mean? The first thing that pops to mind is that Corps is derived from Corporation. “A body that is granted a charter recognizing it as a separate legal entity having its own rights, privileges, and liabilities distinct from those of its members.” Organization would fit better?

You don’t want “Currently”, because we may already know the Alien Goal or the meaning of alien attacks?[/color]

[b]Retaliation missions are performed with high precision, taking special care in maintaining the surprise element with astonishing efficiency; the lack of time to properly prepare for the Alien assault leaves little to no time for any sort of evacuation.[/b] The Aliens' objective is simple; to exterminate every man in the base or to raise it to the ground trying. Any ground assault force sent to directly attack an X-Corps base is likely to be large and elite; the Aliens will not take half measures once the decision to attack has been made.
[color="red"]
I was ready to change “sort of” to “effective”. In EU, you didn’t have time to transfer stuff/people between bases, right? Will this be “corrected” in Xenocide? What would be the normal procedure if X-Corps existed? I mean, what is the concept behind Transfer in Xenocide?[/color]

[b]Unfortunately, this means that vessels on retaliation missions will be difficult to intercept, given their firepower, resistance and the fact that they will most likely enter the atmosphere near to our bases in order to directly attack them. Thus, only a limited timeframe will be available in order to launch an interception and they will have a significant chance of landing before receiving critical punishment from base defenses[/b]. Having successfully evaded the base's [b]perimeter[/b], a [b]wave[/b] of Alien invaders will be unleashed through the [s]base’s[/s] landing pads and base access facilities. Teams appointed as base defense personnel should expect fierce and brutal close quarter fighting, with no chance of escape and [b]the possibility of fighting against overwhelming odds.[/b]

Scaling back our activities [b]in general[/b], desperately trying to avoid attracting attention, is not an option. Therefore, the only effective countermeasure is evasion and concealment. To attack X-Corps, the Aliens must first locate the base, which will require several UFOs scouting the approximate area. If the UFOs can be kept away from the base, the chances of discovery should be kept to a minimum. In addition, our bases [b]should eschew interception launches and communication[/b] whenever Alien vessels are near in order to minimize the chance of detection. If they decide to attack, then every effort must be made to prevent a Retaliation vessel from reaching the base. In the end, it will be down to the base's personnel to fight for their very lives. This type of Alien activity, although rare, poses the single greatest threat to X-Corps’ personnel and [b]resources;[/b] in extreme cases, even its own survival.

[color="red"]The first sentence means in general. Stop intercepting aliens, stop communicating and transfering/buying goods etc. THAT isn't an option. I don't mean situations like having an Alien ship nearby, that isn't a general situation, it's a specific one. That's my point.[/color]

- "I think we could plant remote mines in the Base Access Facility before the Aliens land. Once they enter, *BOOM*!"
- "What about the Landing Pads?"
- "Let's put barricades there and throw our soldiers to the fight!"
- "Well... I don't think it will work that way..."
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[quote name='kafros' date='Jun 3 2006, 06:47 PM']Should I change anything here?
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This is yours now. Prepare a new draft please. :)
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[quote name='Mad' date='Jun 3 2006, 07:03 PM'][quote name='kafros' date='Jun 3 2006, 06:47 PM']Should I change anything here?
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This is yours now. Prepare a new draft please. :)
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Indeed I will, I just hoped that someone would make a comment... any comment..... :P

Ok, I will think of something special...
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I tried brainstorming, but I couldn't add any new ideas... <_<
At least I made some corrections and I changed the fluff...
Could someone help? Please? :)




ALIEN RETALIATION
X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Research/Alien Retaliation

Aggressive Alien activity occurs in various forms, such as offensive ground tactics, returned fire from UFO's and terror attacks. All include aspects of aggravated response to X-Corps intervention. However, this form of counterstrike is mainly reactionary, responding to the immediate threat without further planning or forethought.

Alien Retaliation is a collection of special retaliatory strike tactics triggered by X-Corps continued success in UFO interception and disruption of Alien activities. Alien retaliation attacks are well-planned and efficiently deployed assaults where the fight is taken directly to X-Corps. The fact that Aliens might risk such an assault on the corporation is hard evidence that our interference in Alien activities has a more profound impact than we realize.

Retaliation missions are performed with high precision, taking special care in maintaining the surprise element with astonishing efficiency; the lack of time to properly prepare for the Alien assault leaves little to no time for any sort of evacuation. The Aliens' objective is to exterminate every man in the base, or to raise it to the ground trying. Any ground assault force sent to directly attack an X-Corps base is likely to be large and consisting of elite soldiers, with no possibility of turning back or surrendering.

Unfortunately, this means that vessels on retaliation missions will be difficult to intercept, given their firepower, resistance and the fact that they will most likely enter the atmosphere near to our bases in order to directly attack them. Thus, only a limited timeframe will be available in order to launch an interception and they will have a significant chance of landing before receiving critical punishment from base defense facilities. Having successfully evaded the base's perimeter, a wave of Alien invaders will be unleashed through the landing pads and base access facilities. Teams appointed as base defense personnel should expect fierce and brutal close quarter fighting, with no chance of escape and the possibility of fighting against overwhelming odds.

Scaling back our activities in general, desperately trying to avoid attracting attention, is not an option. Therefore, the only effective countermeasure is evasion and concealment. To attack X-Corps, the Aliens must first locate the base, which will require several UFOs scouting the approximate area. If the UFOs can be kept away from the base, the chances of discovery should be kept to a minimum. In addition, our bases should eschew interception launches and communication whenever Alien vessels are near in order to minimize the chance of detection. If they decide to attack, then every effort must be made to prevent a Retaliation vessel from reaching the base. In the end, it will be down to the base's personnel to fight for their very lives. This type of Alien activity, although rare, poses the single greatest threat to X-Corps’ personnel and resources; in extreme cases, even its own survival.

- Well, we will stuff every last proximity mine we have in the Access facility and we will blow up the landing pads!
- So, how are we supposed to exit the base after their postpone their attack?
- "Well... I don't think it will work that way...
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just a few comments, good draft :)
[quote name='kafros' date='Jun 3 2006, 08:39 PM']ALIEN RETALIATION
X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Research/Alien Retaliation

Aggressive Alien activity occurs in various forms, such as offensive ground tactics, returned fire from UFO's and terror attacks. All include aspects of aggravated response to X-Corps intervention. However, this form of counterstrike is mainly reactionary, responding to the immediate threat without further planning or forethought.

Alien Retaliation is a collection of special retaliatory strike tactics [color="blue"]buy it now for your children! Alien Retaliation is a fun for the whole family... :P sorry.  ^_^  seriously,maybe rephrase this one a little bit? I feel especially the word "collection" gives it an odd feeling. [/color]maybe  triggered by X-Corps continued success in UFO interception and disruption of Alien activities. Alien retaliation attacks are well-planned and efficiently deployed assaults where the fight is taken directly to X-Corps. The fact that Aliens might risk such an assault on the corporation [color="blue"]the corporation issue again... :)[/color] is hard evidence that our interference in Alien activities has a more profound impact than we realize.

Retaliation missions are performed with high precision, taking special care in maintaining the surprise element with astonishing efficiency; the lack of time to properly prepare for the Alien assault leaves little to no time for any sort of evacuation. The Aliens' objective is to exterminate every man in the base, or to raise it to the ground trying. Any ground assault force sent to directly attack an X-Corps base is likely to be large and consisting of elite soldiers, with no possibility of turning back or surrendering.

Unfortunately, this means that vessels on retaliation missions will be difficult to intercept, given their firepower, resistance and the fact that they will most likely enter the atmosphere near to our bases in order to directly attack them. Thus, only a limited timeframe will be available in order to launch an interception and they will have a significant chance of landing before receiving critical punishment from base defense facilities. Having successfully evaded the base's perimeter, a wave of Alien invaders will be unleashed through the landing pads and base access facilities. Teams appointed as base defense personnel should expect fierce and brutal close quarter fighting, with no chance of escape and the possibility of fighting against overwhelming odds.
[color="blue"]Doesn't read bad, though I feel it might be a bit too explicit for a scientific report.
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Scaling back our activities in general, desperately trying to avoid attracting attention, is not an option. Therefore, the only effective countermeasure is evasion and concealment. To attack X-Corps, the Aliens must first locate the base, [i]which will require[/i] [color="blue"]requireing?[/color] several UFOs scouting the approximate area. If the UFOs can be kept away from the base, the chances of discovery should be kept to a minimum. [color="blue"]Maybe you could "clausulate" this a bit. Like "Keeping away hostile air activity..." Or "Minimizing hostile are space violation..."[/color] In addition, our bases should eschew interception launches and communication whenever Alien vessels are near in order to minimize the chance of detection. If they [color="blue"]Who?[/color] decide to attack, then every effort must be made to prevent a Retaliation vessel from reaching the base. In the end, it will be down to the base's personnel to fight for their very lives. This type of Alien activity, although rare, poses the single greatest threat to X-Corps’ personnel and resources; in extreme cases, even its own survival.

- Well, we will stuff every last proximity mine we have in the Access facility and we will blow up the landing pads!
- So, how are we supposed to exit the base after their postpone their attack?
- "Well... I don't think it will work that way...
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ALIEN RETALIATION
X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Research/Alien Retaliation

Aggressive Alien activity occurs in various forms, such as offensive ground tactics, returned fire from UFO's and terror attacks. All include aspects of aggravated response to X-Corps intervention. However, this form of counterstrike is mainly reactionary, responding to the immediate threat without further planning or forethought.

[color="purple"]Alien Retaliation is an assemblage of special retaliatory strike tactics, which are thought to be triggered by long-term success in UFO interception and disruption of Alien activities. This kind of attack is a well-planned and efficiently deployed assault [/color]where the fight is taken directly to X-Corps. The fact that Aliens might risk such an assault on the [color="purple"]organization[/color] is hard evidence that our interference in Alien activities has a more profound impact than we [color="purple"]currently [/color]realize.

Retaliation missions are performed with high precision, taking special care in maintaining the surprise element with astonishing efficiency; the lack of time to properly prepare for the Alien assault leaves little to no time for any sort of evacuation. The Aliens' objective is to exterminate every man in the base, or to raise it to the ground trying. Any ground assault force sent to directly attack an X-Corps base is likely to be large and consisting of elite soldiers, with no possibility of turning back or surrendering. [color="purple"]Thus, it is vital that such an offense must be counter-measured ASAP. The effect of such a consternation is a limited timeframe for reactionary activities, such as UFO interception. If the vessel manages to break through the bases’ perimeter, then the teams appointed as base defense personnel should expect fierce and brutal close quarter fighting, with no chance of escape and the possibility of fighting against overwhelming odds.
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Desperately trying to avoid attracting attention by scaling back our activities is not an option. Nevertheless, it is greatly advised to work in stealth whenever applicable. Therefore, the only effective countermeasure is evasion and concealment. To attack X-Corps, the Aliens must first locate the base, [color="purple"]requiring aerial scouting of the approximate area by Alien vessels. Hindering hostile air activity will guarantee minimal chances of discovery. So,[/color] our bases should eschew interception launches and communication whenever Alien vessels are near in order to minimize the chance of detection. If a Retaliation mission is launched, then every effort must be made to prevent the offending vessel from reaching the base. In the end, it will be down to the base's personnel to fight for their very lives. This type of Alien activity, although rare, poses the single greatest threat to X-Corps’ personnel and resources; in extreme cases, even its own survival.

- Well, we will stuff every last proximity mine we have in the Access facility and we will blow up the landing pads!
- So, how are we supposed to exit the base after their postpone their attack?
- "Well... I don't think it will work that way...
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"triggered" sounds a bit too much like game mechanics to me :)

you know, somehow talking about "country A's constant intrusions into country B's territory triggered a nuclear strike" somehow wouldn't work in real life.

Perhaps something like this?:

"Alien retaliation missions are direct strikes against X-Corps facilities. Long-term success in UFO interception and disruption of Alien activities in a given area are probably the main causes for the Aliens to perform this kind of attack: a well-planned and efficiently deployed assault where the fight is taken directly to X-Corps."
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[quote]"Alien retaliation missions are direct strikes against X-Corps facilities. Long-term success in UFO interception and the disruption of Alien activities in a given area are likely to instigate such an attack: a calculated and strategically deployed assault where the fight is taken directly to X-Corps."[/quote]

Sounds good, but "well-planned" isn't always the case. ;) Edited by The Master Maniac
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[quote name='Moriarty' date='Jun 9 2006, 08:22 AM']"triggered" sounds a bit too much like game mechanics to me :)

you know, somehow talking about "country A's constant intrusions into country B's territory triggered a nuclear strike" somehow wouldn't work in real life.[/quote]
Maybe, but your comment "triggered my curiosity" :P.
So:

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ALIEN RETALIATION
X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Research/Alien Retaliation

Aggressive Alien activity occurs in various forms, such as offensive ground tactics, returned fire from UFO's and terror attacks. All include aspects of aggravated response to X-Corps intervention. However, this form of counterstrike is mainly reactionary, responding to the immediate threat without further planning or forethought.
[color="purple"]
Alien retaliation missions are direct strikes against X-Corps facilities. Long-term success in UFO interception and disruption of Alien activities in a given area are probably the main causes for the Aliens to perform this efficiently deployed assault against X-Corps.[/color] The fact that Aliens might risk such an attack on the organization is hard evidence that our interference in Alien activities has a more profound impact than we currently realize.

Retaliation missions are performed with high precision, taking special care in maintaining the surprise element with astonishing efficiency; the lack of time to properly prepare for the Alien assault leaves little to no time for any sort of evacuation. The Aliens' objective is to exterminate every man in the base, or to raise it to the ground trying. Any ground assault force sent to directly attack an X-Corps base is likely to be large and consisting of elite soldiers, with no possibility of turning back or surrendering. Thus, it is vital that such an offense must be counter-measured ASAP. The effect of such a consternation is a limited timeframe for reactionary activities, such as UFO interception. If the vessel manages to break through the bases’ perimeter, then the teams appointed as base defense personnel should expect fierce and brutal close quarter fighting, with no chance of escape and the possibility of fighting against overwhelming odds.

Desperately trying to avoid attracting attention by scaling back our activities is not an option. Nevertheless, it is greatly advised to work in stealth whenever applicable. Therefore, the only effective countermeasure is evasion and concealment. To attack X-Corps, the Aliens must first locate the base, requiring aerial scouting of the approximate area by Alien vessels. Hindering hostile air activity will guarantee minimal chances of discovery. So, our bases should eschew interception launches and communication whenever Alien vessels are near in order to minimize the chance of detection. If a Retaliation mission is launched, then every effort must be made to prevent the offending vessel from reaching the base. In the end, it will be down to the base's personnel to fight for their very lives. This type of Alien activity, although rare, poses the single greatest threat to X-Corps’ personnel and resources; in extreme cases, even its own survival.

- Well, we will stuff every last proximity mine we have in the Access facility and we will blow up the landing pads!
- So, how are we supposed to exit the base after their postpone their attack?
- "Well... I don't think it will work that way...
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ALIEN RETALIATION

X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Research/Alien Retaliation

 

Aggressive Alien activity occurs in various forms, such as offensive ground tactics, returned fire from UFO's and terror attacks. All include aspects of aggravated response to X-Corps intervention. However, this form of counterstrike is mainly reactionary, responding to the immediate threat without further planning or forethought.

Alien retaliation missions are direct strikes against X-Corps facilities. Long-term success in UFO interception and disruption of Alien operations and logistics are probably the main causes for the Aliens to perform this efficiently deployed assault against X-Corps. The fact that they might risk such an attack on the organization is hard evidence that our interference in their activities has a more profound impact than we currently realize.

Retaliation missions are performed with high precision, taking special care in maintaining the surprise element with astonishing efficiency; the lack of time to properly prepare for the Alien assault leaves little to no time for any sort of evacuation. The Aliens' objective is to exterminate every man in the base, or to raise it to the ground trying. Any ground assault force sent to directly attack an X-Corps base is likely to be large and consisting of elite soldiers, with no possibility of turning back or surrendering. Thus, it is vital that such an offense must be counter-measured ASAP. The effect of such consternation is a limited timeframe for reactionary activities, such as UFO interception. If the vessel manages to break through the bases’ perimeter, then the teams appointed as base defense personnel should expect fierce and brutal close quarter fighting, with no chance of escape and the possibility of fighting against overwhelming odds.

 

Desperately trying to avoid attracting attention by scaling back our activities is not an option. Nevertheless, it is greatly advised to work in stealth whenever applicable. Therefore, the only effective countermeasure is evasion and concealment. To attack X-Corps, the Aliens must first locate the base, requiring aerial scouting of the approximate area by Alien vessels. Hindering hostile air activity will guarantee minimal chances of discovery. Therefore, our bases should eschew interception launches and communication whenever Alien vessels are near in order to minimize the chance of detection. If a Retaliation mission is launched, then every effort must be made to prevent the offending vessel from reaching the base. In the end, it will be down to the base's personnel to fight for their very lives. This type of Alien activity, although rare, poses the single greatest threat to X-Corps’ personnel and resources; in extreme cases, even its own survival.

 

- Well, we will stuff every proximity mine we have in the Access facility and we will blow up the landing pads!

- So, how are we supposed to exit the base after they postpone their attack?

- Well... I didn’t think of that…

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Very good draft =b

ALIEN RETALIATION

X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Research/Alien Retaliation

 

Aggressive Alien activity occurs in various forms, such as offensive ground tactics, returned fire from UFO's and terror attacks. All include aspects of aggravated response to X-Corps intervention. However, this form of counterstrike is mainly reactionary, responding to the immediate threat without further planning or forethought.

 

Alien retaliation missions are direct strikes against X-Corps facilities. Long-term success in UFO interception and disruption of Alien operations and logistics probably are the main cause? are probably the main causes for the Aliens to perform this efficiently deployed assault against X-Corps. The fact that they might risk such an attack on the organization is hard evidence that our interference in their activities has a more profound impact than we currently realize.

 

Retaliation missions are performed with high precision, taking special care in maintaining the surprise element with astonishing efficiency; the lack of time to properly prepare for the Alien assault leaves little to no time for any sort of evacuation. The Aliens' objective is to exterminate every man in the base, or to raise it to the ground trying. Any ground assault force sent to directly attack an X-Corps base is likely to be large and consisting of elite soldiers, with no possibility of turning back or surrendering. Thus, it is vital that such an offense must be counter-measured ASAP yes, ASAP is military terminology, but not everyone might know what it means. Please stick to "as soon as possible". . The effect of such consternation is a limited timeframe for reactionary activities, such as UFO interception. If the which? vessel manages to break through the bases’ perimeter, then sounds odd here. maybe leave it out. the teams appointed as base defense personnel should expect fierce and brutal close quarter fighting, with no chance of escape and the possibility of fighting against overwhelming odds.

 

Desperately trying to avoid attracting attention by scaling back our activities is not an option. Nevertheless, it is greatly advised to work in stealth whenever applicable. Therefore, the only effective countermeasure is evasion and concealment. To attack X-Corps, the Aliens must first locate the base, requiring aerial scouting of the approximate area by Alien vessels. Hindering hostile air activity will guarantee minimal chances of discovery. Therefore, our bases should eschew interception launches and communication whenever Alien vessels are near in order to minimize the chance of detection. If a Retaliation mission is launched, then again... :) every effort must be made to prevent the offending vessel from reaching the base. In the end, it will be down to the base's personnel to fight for their very lives. This type of Alien activity, although rare, poses the single greatest threat to X-Corps’ personnel and resources; in extreme cases, even its own survival.

 

- Well, we will stuff every proximity mine we have in the Access facility and we will blow up the landing pads!

- So, how are we supposed to exit the base after they postpone their attack?

- Well... I didn’t think of that…

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ALIEN RETALIATION

X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Research/Alien Retaliation

 

Aggressive Alien activity occurs in various forms, such as offensive ground tactics, returned fire from UFO's and terror attacks. All include aspects of aggravated response to X-Corps intervention. However, this form of counterstrike is mainly reactionary, responding to the immediate threat without further planning or forethought.

 

Alien retaliation missions are direct strikes against X-Corps facilities. Long-term success in UFO interception and disruption of Alien operations and logistics probably are the main cause for the Aliens to perform this efficiently deployed assault against X-Corps. The fact that they might risk such an attack on the organization is hard evidence that our interference in their activities has a more profound impact than we currently realize.

 

IMHO, it doesn't sound any better, in the contrary...

 

Retaliation missions are performed with high precision, taking special care in maintaining the surprise element with astonishing efficiency; the lack of time to properly prepare for the Alien assault leaves little to no time for any sort of evacuation. The Aliens' objective is to exterminate every man in the base, or to raise it to the ground trying. Any ground assault force sent to directly attack an X-Corps base is likely to be large and consisting of elite soldiers, with no possibility of turning back or surrendering. Thus, it is vital that such an offense must be counter-measured as soon as possible. The effect of such consternation is a limited timeframe for reactionary activities, such as UFO interception. If the attacking vessel manages to break through the bases’ perimeter, the teams appointed as base defense personnel should expect fierce and brutal close quarter fighting, with no chance of escape and the possibility of fighting against overwhelming odds.

 

ASAP and ETA are used in most major war movies and strategy games.

 

Desperately trying to avoid attracting attention by scaling back our activities is not an option. Nevertheless, it is greatly advised to work in stealth whenever applicable. Therefore, the only effective countermeasure is evasion and concealment. To attack X-Corps, the Aliens must first locate the base, requiring aerial scouting of the approximate area by Alien vessels. Hindering hostile air activity will guarantee minimal chances of discovery. Therefore, our bases should eschew interception launches and communication whenever Alien vessels are near in order to minimize the chance of detection. Once a Retaliation mission is launched, every effort must be made to prevent the offending vessel from reaching the base. In the end, it will be down to the base's personnel to fight for their very lives. This type of Alien activity, although rare, poses the single greatest threat to X-Corps’ personnel and resources; in extreme cases, even its own survival.

 

- Well, we will stuff every proximity mine we have in the Access facility and we will blow up the landing pads!

- So, how are we supposed to exit the base after they postpone their attack?

- Well... I didn’t think of that…

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Not bad, not bad at all. Just some minor points.

 

The Aliens' objective is to exterminate every man in the base, or to raise it to the ground trying.

I assume you wanted to use "raze" instead of "raise", correct? ^_^

 

This type of Alien activity, although rare, poses the single greatest threat to X-Corps’ personnel and resources; in extreme cases, even its own survival.

Something is fishy with the semicolon. Both parts on either side of a semi need to be complete sentences I think. Maybe rewrite this part or split it into 2 sentences. I'm leaning to two separate sentences as it flows better. :wink1:

Something like:

This type of Alien activity, although rare, poses the single greatest threat to X-Corps’ personnel and resources. In extreme cases, even its own survival may hinge upon complete success.

 

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"Raise" was introduced by MagicAndy at post #3, it wasn't my idea. Actually, I didn't even know the word "raze". I think that "raise it to the ground" also fits ;)

 

Unfortunately, I couldn't find anything else to change, it reads good to me. Comments please?

 

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ALIEN RETALIATION

X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Research/Alien Retaliation

 

Aggressive Alien activity occurs in various forms, such as offensive ground tactics, returned fire from UFO's and terror attacks. All include aspects of aggravated response to X-Corps intervention. However, this form of counterstrike is mainly reactionary, responding to the immediate threat without further planning or forethought.

 

Alien retaliation missions are direct strikes against X-Corps facilities. Long-term success in UFO interception and disruption of Alien operations and logistics probably are the main cause for the Aliens to perform this efficiently deployed assault against X-Corps. The fact that they might risk such an attack on the organization is hard evidence that our interference in their activities has a more profound impact than we currently realize.

 

Retaliation missions are performed with high precision, taking special care in maintaining the surprise element with astonishing efficiency; the lack of time to properly prepare for the Alien assault leaves little to no time for any sort of evacuation. The Aliens' objective is to exterminate every man in the base, or to raze it to the ground trying. Any ground assault force sent to directly attack an X-Corps base is likely to be large and consisting of elite soldiers, with no possibility of turning back or surrendering. Thus, it is vital that such an offense must be counter-measured as soon as possible. The effect of such consternation is a limited timeframe for reactionary activities, such as UFO interception. If the attacking vessel manages to break through the bases’ perimeter, the teams appointed as base defense personnel should expect fierce and brutal close quarter fighting, with no chance of escape and the possibility of fighting against overwhelming odds.

 

Desperately trying to avoid attracting attention by scaling back our activities is not an option. Nevertheless, it is greatly advised to work in stealth whenever applicable. Therefore, the only effective countermeasure is evasion and concealment. To attack X-Corps, the Aliens must first locate the base, requiring aerial scouting of the approximate area by Alien vessels. Hindering hostile air activity will guarantee minimal chances of discovery. Therefore, our bases should eschew interception launches and communication whenever Alien vessels are near in order to minimize the chance of detection. Once a Retaliation mission is launched, every effort must be made to prevent the offending vessel from reaching the base. In the end, it will be down to the base's personnel to fight for their very lives. This type of Alien activity, although rare, poses the single greatest threat to X-Corps’ personnel and resources. In extreme cases, even its own survival may hinge upon complete success.

 

- Well, we will stuff every proximity mine we have in the Access facility and we will blow up the landing pads!

- So, how are we supposed to exit the base after they postpone their attack?

- Well... I didn’t think of that…

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Mad? :unsure:

Oh, sorry, skipped my attention. You know I'm a little busy with RL atm. let me have a look....

 

Edit:

Good draft, third § might still need some work. Sorry.

ALIEN RETALIATION

X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Research/Alien Retaliation

 

Aggressive Alien activity occurs in various forms, such as offensive ground tactics, returned fire from UFO's and terror attacks. All include aspects of aggravated response to X-Corps intervention. However, this form of counterstrike is mainly reactionary, responding to the immediate threat without further planning or forethought.

 

Alien retaliation missions are direct strikes against X-Corps facilities. Long-term success in UFO interception and disruption of Alien operations and logistics probably are the main cause for the Aliens to perform this efficiently deployed assault against X-Corps. The fact that they might risk such an attack on the organization is hard evidence that our interference in their activities has a more profound impact than we currently realize.

 

Retaliation missions are performed with high precision, taking special care in maintaining the surprise element with astonishing efficiency; the lack of time to properly prepare for the Alien assault leaves little to no time for any sort of evacuation. repeated use of "time" The Aliens' objective is to exterminate every man in the base, or to raze it to the ground trying. Any (maybe remove any? I think this would enhance text flow.) ground assault forces sent to directly attack an X-Corps base is are likely to be large and consisting of elite soldiers, with no possibility of turning back or surrendering. Thus, it is vital that such an offense aggress? must be counter-measured as soon as possible. The effect of such consternation (what do you want to say? I mean, I think I know what you want to say, but I think the refference is not correct. Plus I think constreantion is the wrong word here.) is a limited timeframe for reactionary activities, such as UFO interception. If the attacking vessel manages to break through the bases’ perimeter, the teams appointed as base defense personnel should expect fierce and brutal close quarter fighting, with no chance of escape and the possibility of fighting against overwhelming odds.

 

Desperately trying to avoid attracting attention by scaling back our activities is not an option. Nevertheless, it is greatly advised to work in stealth whenever applicable. Therefore, the only effective countermeasure is evasion and concealment. To attack X-Corps, the Aliens must first locate the base, requiring aerial scouting of the approximate area by Alien vessels. Hindering hostile air activity will guarantee minimal chances of discovery. Therefore, our bases should eschew interception launches and communication whenever Alien vessels are near in order to minimize the chance of detection. Once a Retaliation mission is launched, every effort must be made to prevent the offending (attacking) vessel from reaching the base. In the end, it will be down to the base's personnel to fight for their very lives. This type of Alien activity, although rare, poses the single greatest threat to X-Corps’ personnel and resources. In extreme cases, even its own survival may hinge upon complete success.

 

- Well, we will stuff every proximity mine we have in the Access facility and we will blow up the landing pads!

- So, how are we supposed to exit the base after they postpone their attack?

- Well... I didn’t think of that…

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ALIEN RETALIATION

X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Research/Alien Retaliation

 

Aggressive Alien activity occurs in various forms, such as offensive ground tactics, returned fire from UFO's and terror attacks. All include aspects of aggravated response to X-Corps intervention. However, this form of counterstrike is mainly opportunistic, responding to the immediate threat without further planning or forethought.

 

Alien retaliation missions are direct strikes against X-Corps facilities. Long-term success in UFO interception and disruption of Alien operations and logistics probably are the main cause for the Aliens to perform this efficiently deployed assault against X-Corps. The fact that they might risk such an attack on the organization is hard evidence that our interference in their activities has a more profound impact than we currently realize.

 

Retaliation missions are performed with high precision, taking special care in maintaining the surprise element with astonishing efficiency; the lack of time to properly prepare for the Alien assault leaves little to no time for any sort of evacuation. repeated use of "time" The Aliens' objective is to exterminate every man in the base, or to raze it to the ground trying. Any (maybe remove any? I think this would enhance text flow.) ground assault forces sent to directly attack an X-Corps base is are likely to be large and consisting of elite soldiers, with no possibility of turning back or surrendering. Thus, it is vital that such an offense aggress? must be counter-measured as soon as possible. The effect of such consternation (what do you want to say? I mean, I think I know what you want to say, but I think the refference is not correct. Plus I think constreantion is the wrong word here.) is a limited timeframe for reactionary activities, such as UFO interception. If the attacking vessel manages to break through the bases’ perimeter, the teams appointed as base defense personnel should expect fierce and brutal close quarter fighting, with no chance of escape and the possibility of fighting against overwhelming odds.

 

Scaling back our activities to avoid attracting attention would be an act of desperation, and is not an option. Nevertheless, it is necessary to work with stealth. Our only effective countermeasures are evasion and concealment. To attack X-Corps, the Aliens must first locate the base, which requires aerial scouting of the approximate (redundant - "scouting" implies "approximate") area by Alien vessels. Hindering hostile air activity, in addition eschewing interception launches and communication whenever Alien vessels are near, should minimize the chances of detection. Once a Retaliation mission is launched, every effort must be made to prevent the offending (attacking) vessel from reaching the base. If the Aliens break through, it will come down to the base's personnel in a fight for their very lives. This type of Alien activity, although rare, poses the single greatest threat to X-Corps’ personnel and resources. In extreme cases, the project's survival may hinge upon successfully repelling these attacks.

 

- Well, let's stuff every proximity mine we have in the Access facility and we will (remove for flow) blow up the landing pads!

- So, how are we supposed to exit the base after they postpone their attack?

- Well... I didn’t think of that…

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I've made some suggestions to improve flow, mainly in the last section - feel free to ignore them if you don't like them. I copied from Mad's post, so his are still in there, too.

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Thank you both :). I've prepared the next draft (it's mostly minor improvements and implementation of your ideas). Although I think I should have worked a bit more on it, I will post it in order to listen to your ideas and to save it for another time.

 

ALIEN RETALIATION

X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Research/Alien Retaliation

 

Aggressive alien activity occurs in various forms, such as offensive ground tactics, returned fire from UFO's and terror attacks. All include aspects of aggravated response to X-Corps intervention. However, this form of counterstrike is mainly opportunistic, responding to the immediate threat without further planning or forethought.

 

Alien retaliation missions are direct strikes against X-Corps facilities. Long-term success in UFO interception and disruption of Alien operations and logistics probably are the main cause for the Aliens to perform this efficiently deployed assault against X-Corps. The fact that they might risk such an attack on the organization is hard evidence that our interference in their activities has a more profound impact than we currently realize.

 

Retaliation missions are performed with high precision, taking special care in maintaining the surprise element with astonishing efficiency; the lack of time to properly prepare for the alien assault prohibits any sort of evacuation. The Aliens' objective is to exterminate every man in the base, or to raze it to the ground trying. Ground assault forces sent to directly attack an X-Corps base are likely to be large and consisting of elite soldiers, with no possibility of turning back or surrendering. Thus, it is vital that such an aggression must be counter-measured as soon as possible. Reactionary activities like UFO interception in such a limited timeframe will possibly prove difficult to accomplish. In case the attacking vessel manages to break through the bases’ perimeter, the teams appointed as base defense personnel should expect fierce and brutal close quarter fighting, with no chance of escape and the possibility of fighting against overwhelming odds.

 

Scaling back our activities to avoid attracting attention would be an act of desperation, and is not an option. Nevertheless, it is necessary to work with stealth. Our only effective countermeasures are evasion and concealment. To attack the X-Corps, the Aliens must first locate the base, which requires aerial scouting of the area by Alien vessels. Hindering hostile air activity, in addition to eschewing interception launches and communication whenever Alien vessels are near, should minimize the chances of detection. Once a Retaliation mission is launched, every effort must be made to prevent the attacking vessel from reaching the base. If the Aliens manage to break through, it will come down to the base's personnel to fight for their very lives. This type of Alien activity, although rare, poses the single greatest threat to X-Corps’ personnel and resources. In extreme cases, the project's survival may hinge upon successfully repelling of these attacks.

 

- Well, let's stuff every proximity mine we have in the Access facility and blow up the landing pads!

- So, how are we supposed to exit the base after they postpone their attack?

- Well... I didn’t think of that…

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The Aliens' objective is to exterminate every man in the base, or to raze it to the ground trying.

 

Forgive me if I'm wrong, but aren't X-CORPS bases built underground? Seems like it'd be hard to destroy something upwards.

 

Overall, I like it, but it seems a little unclear about whether it's about alien retaliation as a whole (for example, the bits about how and why X-CORPS activity creates retaliation should belong under the topic of retaliation as a whole) or the specific mission of attacking and destroying an X-CORPS base (which, in my mind, should fall under a separate, more specific category). Again, it's all pretty well-written, it's just that the scope of the article is fairly murky.

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The Aliens' objective is to exterminate every man in the base, or to raze it to the ground trying.

 

Forgive me if I'm wrong, but aren't X-CORPS bases built underground? Seems like it'd be hard to destroy something upwards.

That's the point of the 'joke' :mellow:

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The Aliens' objective is to exterminate every man in the base, or to raze it to the ground trying.

 

Forgive me if I'm wrong, but aren't X-CORPS bases built underground? Seems like it'd be hard to destroy something upwards.

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hehe. I think it is safe to assume people will understand the picture used.

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WTF

 

raze also rase Audio pronunciation of "raze" ( P ) Pronunciation Key (rz)

tr.v. razed, also rased raz·ing, ras·ing raz·es, ras·es

 

1. To level to the ground; demolish. See Synonyms at ruin.

2. To scrape or shave off.

3. Archaic. To erase.

Even "raise" would fit that sentence, so I can't understand why there is a problem with that....

 

Anyway, they may "technically" not "raise" the base to ground level, but they may "lower" the ground level down to the base's without much problem :P. Whatever the direction, the base and ground levels will be equal :D. Case closed ^_^

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There's a significant difference between what the dictionary says and what the average person understands a word to mean. When I see the word "raze," I think "buildings fall down." Without knowing for sure, I think most people probably think something roughly similar. So even though your definition is technically correct, the unorthodox usage causes some confusion and would probably lead a not-insignificant number of people to make the same smart-donkey remark I did. That's bad.

 

WTF

 

raze also rase Audio pronunciation of "raze" ( P ) Pronunciation Key (rz)

tr.v. razed, also rased raz·ing, ras·ing raz·es, ras·es

 

1. To level to the ground; demolish. See Synonyms at ruin.

2. To scrape or shave off.

3. Archaic. To erase.

Even "raise" would fit that sentence, so I can't understand why there is a problem with that....

 

Anyway, they may "technically" not "raise" the base to ground level, but they may "lower" the ground level down to the base's without much problem :P. Whatever the direction, the base and ground levels will be equal :D. Case closed ^_^

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Well, I like your point :).

 

So, what about something like this:

The Aliens' objective is to exterminate every man in the base or at least cause as much damage as possible.
In case someone thinks "Hey, this means that in case they are overwhelmed they will start throwing grenades inside the various rooms?", there are more alternatives:
The alien "Intimidation Squad" has the sole purpose of exterminating all X-Corps personnel and destoying the base
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Well, this certainly is nitpicky at this point, but I don't believe there are any plans to have damage done to the base in a mission translate to loss of personnel/items/facilities in the base control screens. It might be best to just excise that bit completely and say something like

 

"The aliens' object is to extermine all life in the base, allowing them to dismantle the facility and deal a significant blow to X-Corps operations in the area."

 

Not fancy or terribly exciting, but it's accurate without giving anyone false hope about the ramifications of damage done to a base during a defense mission. Can we put that sort of thing at the top of the list for post 1.0 versions? Because that would totally rock.

 

Well, I like your point :).

 

So, what about something like this:

The Aliens' objective is to exterminate every man in the base or at least cause as much damage as possible.
In case someone thinks "Hey, this means that in case they are overwhelmed they will start throwing grenades inside the various rooms?", there are more alternatives:
The alien "Intimidation Squad" has the sole purpose of exterminating all X-Corps personnel and destoying the base

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Wowowow... I think this is going too far now. I apreciate your input, but I think it is safe to assume, the Aliens will want to do damage to the base. In that line, the expression "raze it to the ground trying" is a figure of speech, and will most probably be identified as such by most people. I agree, that some people will nitpick on this, and that this would be not too good, but on the other hand, this is one expression, we will have other glitches on v1 that people will argue much more on, so I don't see a point in wasting valuable manpower on this anymore. Sorry. That said, kafros, if you really want to rephrase it, it's your CT after all, but I really don't see the need for it and would actually prefer you working on more pressing matters for now.

As for your argument Rhino: I am pretty sure, the aliens won't care a heck in dismalteling the base. They will just blow it up. They just have to invade it to make sure they blow up everything and 1) no valuable technology is left behind in the ruins 2) noone will stop them from blowing up the base.

As for structural damage during a defense mission: there will be structural damage, but for v1 without influence on the gameplay. For v1+ we will enable this feature.

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Wowowow... I think this is going too far now. I apreciate your input, but I think it is safe to assume, the Aliens will want to do damage to the base. In that line, the expression "raze it to the ground trying" is a figure of speech, and will most probably be identified as such by most people. I agree, that some people will nitpick on this, and that this would be not too good, but on the other hand, this is one expression, we will have other glitches on v1 that people will argue much more on, so I don't see a point in wasting valuable manpower on this anymore. Sorry. That said, kafros, if you really want to rephrase it, it's your CT after all, but I really don't see the need for it and would actually prefer you working on more pressing matters for now.

As for your argument Rhino: I am pretty sure, the aliens won't care a heck in dismalteling the base. They will just blow it up. They just have to invade it to make sure they blow up everything and 1) no valuable technology is left behind in the ruins 2) noone will stop them from blowing up the base.

As for structural damage during a defense mission: there will be structural damage, but for v1 without influence on the gameplay. For v1+ we will enable this feature.

 

I'm not trying to offend anyone. I'm a nitpicker. Nitpicking is what I do best. I'm the sort of person who notices every typo, every bit of bad grammar, and every inconsistency in any text I read. I work damn hard to avoid those things in everything I write, and now that I have the opportunity to stamp those things out in other people's writings, I intend to do so to the best of my ability. It doesn't mean I think anyone here is a bad person, or even a bad writer. I'm doing what I do, unapologetically and without hesitation.

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I'm not trying to offend anyone. I'm a nitpicker. Nitpicking is what I do best. I'm the sort of person who notices every typo, every bit of bad grammar, and every inconsistency in any text I read. I work damn hard to avoid those things in everything I write, and now that I have the opportunity to stamp those things out in other people's writings, I intend to do so to the best of my ability. It doesn't mean I think anyone here is a bad person, or even a bad writer. I'm doing what I do, unapologetically and without hesitation.

And there is no bad thing about seing possible flaws in other peoples work. But I strongly recommend you work on your tone as well on distinguishing between major flaws and little flaws. Our CTs can not be perfect in every aspect. If we would want them to be perfect, we would have to spend a lot more time on every CT. Time we don't have. I apreciate your enthusiasm, but please don't be offended that there has to be a point where a CT is finished.

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LFO's idea is what I would also choose :). If there isn't anything else except that minor issue, I think it's ready.

 

ALIEN RETALIATION

X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Research/Alien Retaliation

 

Aggressive alien activity occurs in various forms, such as offensive ground tactics, returned fire from UFO's and terror attacks. All include aspects of aggravated response to X-Corps intervention. However, this form of counterstrike is mainly opportunistic, responding to the immediate threat without further planning or forethought.

 

Alien retaliation missions are direct strikes against X-Corps facilities. Long-term success in UFO interception and disruption of Alien operations and logistics probably are the main cause for the Aliens to perform this efficiently deployed assault against X-Corps. The fact that they might risk such an attack on the organization is hard evidence that our interference in their activities has a more profound impact than we currently realize.

 

Retaliation missions are performed with high precision, taking special care in maintaining the surprise element with astonishing efficiency; the lack of time to properly prepare for the alien assault prohibits any sort of evacuation. The Aliens' objective is to exterminate all personell or raze the base trying. Ground assault forces sent to directly attack an X-Corps base are likely to be large and consisting of elite soldiers, with no possibility of turning back or surrendering. Thus, it is vital that such an aggression must be counter-measured as soon as possible. Reactionary activities like UFO interception in such a limited timeframe will possibly prove difficult to accomplish. In case the attacking vessel manages to break through the bases’ perimeter, the teams appointed as base defense personnel should expect fierce and brutal close quarter fighting, with no chance of escape and the possibility of fighting against overwhelming odds.

 

Scaling back our activities to avoid attracting attention would be an act of desperation, and is not an option. Nevertheless, it is necessary to work with stealth. Our only effective countermeasures are evasion and concealment. To attack the X-Corps, the Aliens must first locate the base, which requires aerial scouting of the area by Alien vessels. Hindering hostile air activity, in addition to eschewing interception launches and communication whenever Alien vessels are near, should minimize the chances of detection. Once a Retaliation mission is launched, every effort must be made to prevent the attacking vessel from reaching the base. If the Aliens manage to break through, it will come down to the base's personnel to fight for their very lives. This type of Alien activity, although rare, poses the single greatest threat to X-Corps’ personnel and resources. In extreme cases, the project's survival may hinge upon successfully repelling of these attacks.

 

- Well, let's stuff every proximity mine we have in the Access facility and blow up the landing pads!

- So, how are we supposed to exit the base after they postpone their attack?

- Well... I didn’t think of that…

Conversation between rookies

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No real objections, just some minor rewording and punctuation changes. Basically, I tried to minimize the use of some words such as "Aliens". These are only suggestions on my part, so use them if you want. As always, strikethroughs are proposed deletions while blue text are additions.

 

ALIEN RETALIATION

X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Research/Alien Retaliation

 

Aggressive alien activity occurs in various forms, such as offensive ground tactics, returned fire from UFO's and terror attacks. All include aspects of aggravated response to X-Corps intervention. However, this form of counterstrike is mainly opportunistic, responding to the immediate threat without further planning or forethought.

 

Alien retaliation missions are direct strikes against X-Corps facilities. Long-term success in UFO interception and disruption of Alien their operations and logistics probably are the main cause for the Aliens to perform this efficiently deployed assault against X-Corps. The fact that they might risk such an attack on the organization is hard evidence that our interference in their activities has a more profound impact than we currently realize.

 

Retaliation missions are performed with high precision, taking special care in maintaining the surprise element with astonishing efficiency; the lack of time to properly prepare for the alien assault prohibits any sort of evacuation. The Aliens' objective is to exterminate all personnel or raze the base trying. Ground assault forces sent to directly attack an X-Corps base are likely to be large and consisting of elite soldiers, with no possibility of turning back or surrendering. Thus, it is vital that such an aggression must be counter-measured as soon as possible. Reactionary activities like UFO interception in such a limited timeframe will possibly prove difficult to accomplish. In case the attacking vessel manages to break through the bases’ perimeter, the teams appointed as base defense personnel staff should expect fierce and brutal close quarter fighting, with no chance of escape and the possibility of fighting against overwhelming odds.

 

Scaling back our activities to avoid attracting attention would be an act of desperation, and is not an option. Nevertheless, it is necessary prudent to work with stealth. Our only effective countermeasures are evasion and concealment. To attack the X-Corps, the Aliens base must first be located, which requires aerial scouting and reconnaissance of the area by Alien vessels UFO’s. Hindering hostile air activity, in addition to eschewing interception launches and communication whenever Alien vessels are near should minimize the chances of detection. Once a Retaliation mission is launched, every effort must be made to prevent the attacking vessel from reaching the base. If the Aliens manage to break through, it will come down to the base's personnel to fight for their very lives. This type of Alien activity, although rare, poses the single greatest threat to X-Corps’ personnel and resources. In extreme cases, the project's very survival may hinge upon successfully repelling of these attacks.

 

- Well, let's stuff every proximity mine we have in the Access facility and blow up the landing pads!

- So, how are we supposed to exit the base after they postpone their attack?

- Well... I didn’t think of that…

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