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#1 Qonfused

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Posted 16 December 2004 - 12:09 PM

Howdy, done with exam's, so here is a go at the heavy plasma rifle clip.
as the plasma rifle clip, its based of the plasma pistol clip. so credits to Kikanaide

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Heavy plasma rifle clip

The heavy plasma rifle clip is a relatively simple piece of technology. In both mechanical and electrical terms it is easy to produce and use. However, the chemistry contained within is more complicated. Each alien weapon fires an optimized type of ammunition, and so the clip relies on a highly balanced set of chemical and physical reactions.

Within the clip are two compartments that hold the reacting ingredients. The first tank holds a gel-like mixture containing highly fractured Xenium. It also includes iron and uranium, along with traces of several other elements. The other tank contains heavy water. It should be noted that both containers are kept highly isolated to prevent malfunction and the risk to user safety is low.

When the two ingredients are mixed, and a high-frequency pulsed EM stimulus applied, the Xenium reacts violently in a manner best described as an explosion. The energy released in the reaction is sufficient to cause fusion of the deuterium atoms in the heavy water; a chain reaction that releases even more energy and superheats the mixture. The result, contained by magnetic fields, is plasma – an ionic, electrically conductive gas. The resulting burst, directed by the weapon, is similar to ball of lighting, but deviates by actually being an extremely high heated form of mass.

This particular clip is designed to administer high amounts of ingredients to a large and accurate weapon with a high damage potential. From the studies of this clip, we conclude that the heavy plasma rifles design is not suited for close range combat. This is due to the relatively long time it takes for the plasma clip to administer the ingredients. In order to compensate this, the clip is manufactured large and therefore supply ingredients for a large number of discharges.
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Edited by Qonfused, 16 December 2004 - 12:11 PM.

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Posted 19 December 2004 - 05:01 AM

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Posted 19 December 2004 - 09:14 AM

pretty good, didn't find any obvious mistakes or anything so it is alright
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Posted 19 December 2004 - 10:12 AM

Oops, sorry Qonfused, haven't had much time to work here since I've been dealing with the texts for proofreading, I'll read the other clips and see if I can help you here :)

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Posted 19 December 2004 - 10:35 AM

This seems to suggest that there WILL be some sort of delay when firing a heavy plasma. Is this planned to be implemented into the game? If not the player might ask why their enemies use that heavy plasma JUST fine to blow their faces off point blank :P.
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Posted 19 December 2004 - 11:08 AM

"This is due to the relatively long time it takes for the plasma clip to administer the ingredients"
I am talking in comparison to other firearms eks. the plasma rifle

Edited by Qonfused, 19 December 2004 - 11:09 AM.

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Posted 19 December 2004 - 06:34 PM

I see, you are saying this delay will be reflected in the higher TU requirements for firing a Heavy Plasma. Gotcha...thanks :D


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Posted 19 December 2004 - 08:40 PM

Looks good, but I don't know about saying it's a "fairly simple piece of technology. . ." and then go into a complicated explanation of how it works. You might get some people lost there.
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Posted 19 December 2004 - 08:44 PM

you mix the stuff, expose it to radiation, and it shoots out the barrel. hOw dificult is that to understand?>

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Posted 19 December 2004 - 08:49 PM

Well, for starters, the "the" was kinda hard to follow :NyaNyaNya:

It's not just mixing the stuff, exposing it to radiation, and shooting it out of a barrel. Within the clip are two compartments that hold the reacting ingredients. The first tank holds a gel-like mixture containing highly fractured Xenium. It also includes iron and uranium, along with traces of several other elements. The other tank contains heavy water. It should be noted that both containers are kept highly isolated to prevent malfunction and the risk to user safety is low.

When the two ingredients are mixed, and a high-frequency pulsed EM stimulus applied, the Xenium reacts violently in a manner best described as an explosion. The energy released in the reaction is sufficient to cause fusion of the deuterium atoms in the heavy water; a chain reaction that releases even more energy and superheats the mixture. The result, contained by magnetic fields, is plasma – an ionic, electrically conductive gas. The resulting burst, directed by the weapon, is similar to ball of lighting, but deviates by actually being an extremely high heated form of mass.

This particular clip is designed to administer high amounts of ingredients to a large and accurate weapon with a high damage potential. From the studies of this clip, we conclude that the heavy plasma rifles design is not suited for close range combat. This is due to the relatively long time it takes for the plasma clip to administer the ingredients. In order to compensate this, the clip is manufactured large and therefore supply ingredients for a large number of discharges.
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Posted 19 December 2004 - 09:57 PM

I think what Qonfused and Blehm mean is that the mechanical properties of the weapon are very simple, just mix it and point it. The complicated part that requires in depth explanation is the "chemical" functioning of it. Which is what is mainly explained in the part you referred to. However there is not much chemistry there so maybe its not so much "chemically" complicated as "____" complicated. l ol please insert a better word here because all I can think of is nuclear. Then again this is technology that hasn't existed so there might not be a word that would satsify me...
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Posted 20 December 2004 - 02:05 AM

"fairly simple piece of technology. . ."
Again its all relative.
We are talking about the full pod of a fission reactor. There are combustionengine-injection system's that are more complicated than this.
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Posted 24 December 2004 - 06:21 PM

so... does no one see anything that needs changing.
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Posted 24 December 2004 - 06:41 PM

From the studies of this clip, we conclude that the heavy plasma rifles design is not suited for close range combat. This is due to the relatively long time it takes for the plasma clip to administer the ingredients. In order to compensate this, the clip is manufactured large and therefore supply ingredients for a large number of discharges.

Er... this is not quite right.

In the original, which we are basing this off of, the heavy plasma has an auto shot option, which in a real world terms, would pobrably be closer to "burst" fire mode, meaning three rapid fire shots in close proximity of time. Essentially, that means that the heavy plasma rifle can reload rapidly, which the above quote seems to say it can't.
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Posted 25 December 2004 - 03:34 AM

its relative, and compared to other auto-fire weapons.

I see, you are saying this delay will be reflected in the higher TU requirements for firing a Heavy Plasma.  Gotcha...thanks :D
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Yes its reflected in the higher TU requirments for firing.

Did anyone else misinterpret this part of the entry? Because if it’s a problem I can change it?

Edited by Qonfused, 25 December 2004 - 03:34 AM.

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Posted 25 December 2004 - 03:50 AM

Hmm... I see.
But nevertheless, the exsitence of a "burst" mode fire option indicates that the weapon is at the ver least a reasonable close range weapon. On the other hand, a weapon WITHOUT autoshot, like the Heavy Laser, where you can only snap shot, you would prefer to stay at range away from a person weilding a autoshot capable gun.

My suggestion is that you strip out that part entirely. Most other CTs I've read don't really go too much into detail about the rate of fire, at the most about possible fire-modes.
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Posted 25 December 2004 - 03:53 AM

maybe, will make another version soon.
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Posted 25 December 2004 - 06:38 PM

2. draft.
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X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Weapons/HeavyPlasmaClip

The heavy plasma rifle clip is a relatively simple piece of technology. In both mechanical and electrical terms it is easy to produce and use. However, the chemistry contained within is more complicated. Each alien weapon fires an optimized type of ammunition, and so the clip relies on a highly balanced set of chemical and physical reactions.

Within the clip are two compartments that hold the reacting ingredients. The first tank holds a gel-like mixture containing highly fractured Xenium. It also includes iron and uranium, along with traces of several other elements. The other tank contains heavy water. It should be noted that both containers are kept highly isolated to prevent malfunction and the risk to user safety is low.

When the two ingredients are mixed, and a high-frequency pulsed EM stimulus applied, the Xenium reacts violently in a manner best described as an explosion. The energy released in the reaction is sufficient to cause fusion of the deuterium atoms in the heavy water; a chain reaction that releases even more energy and superheats the mixture. The result, contained by magnetic fields, is plasma – an ionic, electrically conductive gas. The resulting burst, directed by the weapon, is similar to ball of lighting, but deviates by actually being an extremely high heated form of mass.

This particular clip is designed to administer high amounts of ingredients to a large and accurate weapon with a high damage potential. From the studies of this clip, we conclude that the heavy plasma rifles design is suited for long range combat. This is due to the clips design, showing a slightly lower fire rate performance than most close range automatic weapons.

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I changed the last part a bit. And added a standardized heading.
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Posted 28 December 2004 - 09:14 AM

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Posted 01 January 2005 - 04:43 AM

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Posted 09 January 2005 - 10:34 AM

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Posted 10 January 2005 - 03:26 PM

heh, just starving for attention aren't you? ^_^

I took a look and I like what you've done. Its much more simple, and easier to read; kudos. There are some parts that don't sit well with me though. One was

The resulting burst, directed by the weapon, is similar to ball of lighting, but deviates by actually being an extremely high heated form of mass.

A "ball" of lightning isn't really so easy for me to visualize and in my mind reacts completely different than I think plasma would (anyone else agree?) so the simile doesn't add anything for me and possibly others. It feels too much like saying "Its like a ball of lightning...except not".

A big point is that it seems as though you are taking too much liberty in saying that it is suited for long range combat. Unless this has been decided upon and I do not know it, the actual capabilities of the Heavy Plasma are still up in the air. It might just turn out that in the end Heavy Plasma will be a close range weapon; there is nothing stating otherwise to my knowledge. Add to this that in Xcom heavy plasma was pretty much boss at any range I think it might be a little rash to inlude in the CTD that it is intended for long range combat.

Also you should probably spell out "Electromagnetic" instead of EM.

Perhaps there is a way to better explain to the reader that the "slightly lower fire rate" (akward wording, btw) translates to higher TU costs in-game and not some other game mechanic.

Other than these I think this CTD is very well written, keep it up (even in spite of apparent apathy from the rest of the forum)! :D
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Posted 11 March 2005 - 02:16 PM

The usual stuff: Red text indicates additions, orange text indicates deletions, and blue text indicates comments or suggestions.

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It seems that all the plasma clip CTs are virtually alike, so I’ve copy and pasted the relevant sections.

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[HEAVY PLASMA RIFLE]
X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Weapons/[Heavy Plasma Rifle] Clip

The [heavy plasma rifle] clip is a relatively simple piece of technology. In is relatively straightforward in its construction; from both a mechanical and electrical terms viewpoint, it is easy rather simple to reproduce and use. However, the chemistry contained within is considerably more complicated. Each Alien plasma weapon design fires an its own specialized optimized type of ammunition, and their respective clips rely on separately balanced sets so the clip relies on a highly balanced set of chemical and physical reactions. The [heavy plasma rifle] clip's contents are optimized for destructive capability over rate of fire.

Within the [heavy plasma rifle] clip are two compartments that hold the reacting ingredients reactants. The first tank compartment contains holds a gel-like mixture containing highly fractured Xenium,. It also includes iron, and uranium, along with traces and trace amounts of several other elements, while the. The other tank compartment contains heavy water. It should be noted that both containers these contents are kept highly isolated to prevent malfunction and the risk to user safety is low minimize the risk to the user.

When the two ingredients are mixed, and a high-frequency pulsed EM stimulus electromagnetic pulse applied, the Xenium reacts violently in a manner that can be best described as an explosion. The immense amount of released energy released in the reaction is sufficient to cause initiates a fusion chain reaction; the fusion of the deuterium atoms found in the heavy water; a chain reaction that releases even more energy and superheats the mixture, continuing until the reactants are spent. The result, contained by magnetic fields if my idea in the plasma weapons systems CT is accepted, add that the magnetic fields are powered by the same reaction, is plasma – an a superheated, ionic, electrically conductive gas. The resulting burst, directed by the weapon, is similar to ball of energy, but deviates by actually being an extremely highly heated form of mass is not the beam of energy that many might imagine, but actually a form of mass heated to extraordinary levels.

Since the contents of the [heavy plasma rifle] clip have been optimized solely for power, the large amounts of plasma needed for each shot take longer to generate and collimate than in lesser weapons, resulting in a diminished rate of fire. Nevertheless, the [heavy plasma rifle]’s destructive potential is virtually unmatched, and we recommend equipping at least some of our soldiers with such weapons to improve their efficacy out in the field. This particular clip is designed to administer high amounts of ingredients to a large and accurate weapon with a high damage potential. From the studies of this clip, we conclude that the heavy plasma rifles design is suited for long range combat. This is due to the clips design, showing a slightly lower fire rate performance than most close range automatic weapons.

The long range combat aspect should be addressed by the heavy plasma rifle CT- something like “the longer barrel of the heavy plasma rifle can magnetically propel the superheated mass to unparalleled distances” or somesuch.

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[HEAVY PLASMA RIFLE]
X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Weapons/[Heavy Plasma Rifle] Clip

The [Heavy plasma] clip is a relatively simple piece of technology; from both a mechanical and electrical viewpoint, it is easy to reproduce and use. However, the chemistry contained within is considerably more complicated. Each Alien plasma weapon design fires its own specialized ammunition, and their respective clips rely on separately balanced sets of chemical and physical reactions. The [plasma rifle] clip's contents seem to be optimized for a balance between speed and power.

Within the [Heavy plasma] clip are two compartments that hold the reactants. The first compartment contains a gel-like mixture containing highly fractured Xenium, iron, uranium, and trace amounts of several other elements, while the other compartment contains heavy water. It should be noted that these contents are kept highly isolated to minimize the risk to the user.

When the two ingredients are mixed and a high-frequency electromagnetic pulse applied, the Xenium reacts violently in a manner that can be best described as an explosion. The immense amount of released energy initiates a fusion chain reaction; the fusion of deuterium atoms found in heavy water releases even more energy and superheats the mixture, continuing until the reactants are spent. The result, contained by magnetic fields, is plasma – a superheated, ionic, electrically conductive gas. The resulting burst, directed by the weapon, is not the beam of energy that many might imagine, but actually a form of mass heated to extraordinary levels.

Since the contents of the [heavy plasma rifle] clip have been optimized solely for power, its destructive potential is virtually unmatched by any Terran weaponry currently available, being comparable the damage capability of a single blast to that of an HE Rocket, making it ideal for combating heavily armed opponents.

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