The main thing that bothers me in the original sentence is the "should", which implies "they know better than the original designers".
You haven't worked with that many scientists/engineers, have you? Seriously, I don't think I would notice if it changed or see a difference, so I'm not that attached to it. But I've worked with people who, even though they didn't understand vast parts of design, would pick on one particular part that they mostly understood and make suggestions about it. Often (read, almost always), the suggestions were stupid because without understanding how the other parts worked they couldn't possibly know all the tradeoffs that were made during the design of the part they are picking on. I don't know if they think it makes them look intelligent or what...people just do it. So you are correct, it seems to imply that. I suppose, subconsciously, that's why I wrote it that way - they think they know better, but it doesn't work at all. Hence it's their opinion, which is proved incorrect...
Ack, but all this talking about that paragraph made me reread it and see "Initial investigations
(prepositional phrase) has
resulted in ..." Blarg, that gets edited now.
Though I couldn't resist playing with the sentence a bit, by and large, the text looks very polished. I doubt there'll be much to tweak in proofreading. smile.gif
Thanks for the compliment...though in truth a large part of it reflects back on your help, and that of others. It was fun.
Edited by Kikanaide, 30 June 2005 - 03:29 PM.