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#1 Breunor

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Posted 18 December 2003 - 03:24 PM

"It looks pretty high from up here, Jackson! I can hardly see you down there. Stop this lift before it reaches the top, the bay doors are still closed! Stop kidding around, this isn't funny!" Private Josh Maxwell, newly initiated.

Our hangars have been designed to allow for flexible storage of all X-Corps aircraft. Regular maintenance and combat repairs can be carried out in the 50-meter facility using the integrated maintenance bay. Flooring grills are used throughout the facility to aid in cleanup, oil and other fluids are collected and filtered for proper disposal. Standard refueling procedures are carried out using shielded fuel storage tanks, allowing us to top off an aircraft without fear of fuel leaks and explosions. In addition to a reinforced outer casing, each tank has a flexible Kevlar internal bladder with fire retardant gel between the bladder and the outer casing.

Each hanger includes a lift platform that raises the aircraft to the surface for take off and landing. While it is possible for our top pilots to perform VTOLs from within the hangar, this is considered an excessive risk and could be impossible for a damaged aircraft. A scissor lift is operated by hydraulic presses located under the facility floor, and a ratcheted safety joint in the scissors keeps the ramp from falling in case of total hydraulic failure. The hangar roof is level with the landing pad on the surface, and retracts along the facility ceiling using recessed tracks. At full extension the lift is flush with the surface and does not damage landing gear during take off and landing. The hangar roof consists of reinforced concrete, and is surfaced to match the surrounding area. While capable of supporting a significant amount of weight, the hangar bay doors might be a potential weak point in our base's defense. Once the lift is flush with the surface, the aircraft can follow standard take-off procedures, using VTOL or the built-in catapult launcher from the surface.

Note: Due to recent hazing of recruits, infrared sensors have been installed along the edge of the lift platform and aimed at the ceiling to detect any objects hanging off the edge of the lift and stop its accent. This is to prevent possible equipment damage or amputation as the lift reaches surface level. Personnel must clear the lift prior to activation.

Edited by Breunor, 23 December 2003 - 05:36 PM.


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Posted 19 December 2003 - 02:24 AM

Well personaly i think that the aliens should be allowed to enter throught the hangars. It is a soft spot in the base just like the access lift. With their improved weapons breaking in the hangar door should not be to difficult for the aliens. It also makes a base attack more interesting because they have multiple access points.

Ufo-Am did only allow 1 access points for the aliens making the base defence missions way to easy just ambush them.

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Posted 19 December 2003 - 06:37 AM

On XCOM aliens could enter via both the access lift and hangars, so we should follow that path.

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Posted 19 December 2003 - 08:05 AM

:whatwhat: Damn, you beat me to it. I was just working up an appetite to write a description about the Hangar :)

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Posted 19 December 2003 - 09:14 AM

I agree it (being alien access through the hangar) needs to be there, I was just trying to come up with how they get in without ripping the entire thing apart. That's why I included the access hatch line. I guess we don't need to have such details in there anyway. I can include something about the hangar bay being a potential weak point in base defense however.

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Posted 19 December 2003 - 02:14 PM

Heh, Bruenor's first CTD. :)

How about a round of applause! and :beer:

You may want to say that there is a fire retardant layer (abestos?) in between the fuel and the exterior of the tank. Just a fire retardant doesn't seem to make much sense to me
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Posted 19 December 2003 - 02:17 PM

My first? Yeah, technically it's the first CT entry thread that I've started... :happybanana:

Asbestos isn't legally used much in the USA at least, why don't we say it's a fire retardant gel in between them? I'll edit that into the text.

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Posted 19 December 2003 - 02:52 PM

"Well, the x-corps pilots arn't scientists, how should they have known that they have to open the hangar door MANUALY? Why didn't those pesky overpaid nerds make something that does it ON AUTO???"
~Dirrector of Accidents John Carter, giving his eksplanation of a previus accident.

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nice, maybe a bit blank? It could use something about loading/unloading, hiding below ground, VTOL takeoff/45 degree launch, that kind of stuff.

EDIT: Added some fluff text and a few more bits based on these comments. - Breunor

Edited by mikker, 19 December 2003 - 03:44 PM.

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Posted 21 December 2003 - 06:51 AM

looks good to me :)

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Posted 22 December 2003 - 08:05 PM

"It looks pretty high from up here, Jackson! I can hardly see you down there. Stop this lift before it reaches the top. Stop kidding around, this isn't fun-" Private Josh Maxwell, deceased.

People might take offense at this. Making someone's death a joke(which many people will see this as, even if it is not) is just asking for it. I suppose you can leave it if you want, it just seems a little risque to me.

I also agree that there is no need to mention an access hatch. It is much easier to blast through a steel door which is at most 1 meter thick than it is to blast through 5 meters of whatever is above the rest of the base. Remember that the ceilings of the rest of the facilities are also probably somewhat reinforced.

Edited by Ancalagon, 22 December 2003 - 08:10 PM.


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Posted 22 December 2003 - 09:38 PM

I can understand the concern about making it a joke, but seriously I see it more as a warning that screwing around with anything can lead to trouble, these are more excerpts from the Murphy's Law bible I guess. Perhaps I could make it more of a serious/dramatic line, like one tech trying to find the big red shutoff button as a clumsy tech is hanging from the platform, and finally lets go and breaks his legs instead of losing his hands.

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Posted 22 December 2003 - 10:10 PM

Just do not say deceased and it is a fairly normal fluff text... I agree that we shouldnt make jokes about dead people...

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Posted 22 December 2003 - 11:12 PM

People might take offense at this. Making someone's death a joke(which many people will see this as, even if it is not) is just asking for it.  I suppose you can leave it if you want, it just seems a little risque to me.

Ok, I'll bite. Why would people take offense at this? This is a pretty violent game and your guys are expected to die a lot anyway.
You're not making fun of anyone's relative anyway so I don't see why someone should take offense except in the case where he has some mental problem (Even if that's called extreme religious prejudice).

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Posted 23 December 2003 - 12:36 AM

While many people will see the quote as having a serious and dramatic tone, many will see it as a joke, something they're supposed to laugh at. I would say that at most 3/4 of those people will think it is funny, the rest will think it is offensive. They will see it as laughing not only at the person's death, but laughing at his anguish and panic in the last moments of his life. Remember that this quote personifies the character more than a character in ufo defense, which causes more people to be offended by it than a death in UFO defense. Also, most people took the plot of UFO defense seriously, and if they didn't, they didn't mind laughing at their soldiers' deaths. It's not the fact that the person died that will be offensive, it's the fact that people will see us as laughing at the person's death.

Edited by Ancalagon, 23 December 2003 - 12:40 AM.


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Posted 23 December 2003 - 09:19 AM

Ok, I just pulled the text out then, also removed the maintenance hatch line. Any other suggestions for such text? I don't think we HAVE to have such text on every single entry.

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Posted 23 December 2003 - 09:54 AM

Breunor, the text is fine as long as you take out the deceased word of it. In that case sounds like a common joke between soldiers, no more than that... Like some sort of entry joke for anyone (like an initiation on the force).

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Posted 23 December 2003 - 01:24 PM

I have to agree with red knight here, without the deceased thing it's perfectly fine.

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Posted 23 December 2003 - 04:22 PM

just as a side note, all of the base modules had to be upscaled to properly fit the size of the average human. The hanger is 50x50 meters and all other modules are 25x25meters, the original size was too small to handle the avenger (weighs in about 45meters long) which was scaled up so it could accommodate all of its cargo based on 1-1.5 meter squares IIRC.

it really shouldn't affect your text any except for changing the size, and all of your fluff should be easy to add in the texturing stage.

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Posted 23 December 2003 - 05:36 PM

OK, I put it back in and made it a hazing thing instead. Also fixed the size as well.

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HANGAR FACILITY
X-Net://Pegasus.net/Base/Facilities/Hangar

Our hangars have been designed to allow flexible storage of all X-Corps’ aircraft. Regular maintenance and combat repairs can be carried out in this 2500m2 facility using the integrated maintenance bay. Flooring grills are used throughout the facility to aid in cleanup, oil and other fluids are collected and filtered for proper disposal. Standard refueling procedures are carried out using shielded fuel storage tanks, allowing us to top off an aircraft without fear of fuel leaks and explosions. In addition to a reinforced outer casing, each tank has a flexible Kevlar internal bladder with fire retardant gel between the bladder and the outer casing.

Each hanger includes a lift platform that raises the aircraft to the surface for take off and landing. While it is possible for our top pilots to perform VTOLs from within the hangar, this is considered an excessive risk and could be impossible for a damaged aircraft. A scissor lift is operated by hydraulic presses located under the facility floor, and a ratcheted safety joint in the scissors keeps the ramp from falling in case of total hydraulic failure. The hangar roof is leveled with the landing pad on the surface, and retracts along the facility ceiling using recessed tracks. At full extension the lift is flush with the surface and does not damage landing gear during take off and landing. The hangar roof consists of reinforced concrete, and is surfaced to match the surrounding area. While capable of supporting a significant amount of weight, the hangar bay doors might be a potential weak point in our bases’ defense. Once the lift is flush with the surface, the aircraft can follow standard take-off procedures, using VTOL or the built-in catapult launcher from the surface.

Note: Due to recent hazing of recruits, infrared sensors have been installed along the edge of the lift platform and aimed at the ceiling to detect any objects hanging off the edge of the lift and stop its accent. This is to prevent possible equipment damage or amputation as the lift reaches surface level. Personnel must clear the lift prior to activation.

“It looks pretty high from up here, Jackson! I can hardly see you down there. Stop this lift before it reaches the top; the bay doors are still closed! Stop kidding around, this isn't funny!" Private Josh Maxwell, newly initiated.

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HANGAR FACILITY
X-Net://Pegasus.net/Base/Facilities/Hangar

Our hangars have been designed to allow flexible storage of all X-Corps’ aircraft. Regular maintenance and combat repairs can be carried out in this 2500900m2  facility using the integrated maintenance bay. Flooring grills are used throughout the facility to aid in cleanup, oil waste and other fluids are collected and filtered for proper disposal. Standard refueling procedures are carried out using shielded fuel storage tanks, allowing us to top off an aircraft without fear of fuel leaks and explosions. In addition to a reinforced outer casing, each tank has a flexible Kevlar internal bladder with fire retardant gel between the bladder and the outer casing.

Each hanger hangar includes a lift platform that raises the aircraft to the surface for take off and landing. While it is possible for our top pilots to perform VTOLs from within the hangar, this is considered an excessive risk and could be impossible for a damaged aircraft. A scissor lift is operated by hydraulic presses located under the facility floor, and a ratcheted safety joint in the scissors keeps the ramp from falling in case of total hydraulic failure. The hangar roof is leveled with the landing pad on the surface, and retracts along the facility ceiling using recessed tracks. At full extension the lift is flush with the surface and does not damage the landing gear during take off and landing. The hangar roof consists of reinforced concrete, and is surfaced landscaped, camouflated to match the surrounding area. While capable of supporting a significant amount of weight, the hangar bay doors might be a potential weak points in our bases’ defense. Once the lift is flush with the surface, the aircraft can follow standard take-off procedures, using VTOL or the built-in catapult launcher from the surface.

Note: Due to recent hazing of recruits, infrared sensors have been installed along the edge of the lift platform and aimed at the ceiling to detect any objects hanging off the edge of the lift and stop its accentascent. This is to prevent possible equipment damage or amputation as the lift reaches surface level. Personnel must clear the lift prior to its activation.

“It looks pretty high from up here, Jackson! I can hardly see you down there. Stop this lift before it reaches the top; the bay doors are still closed! Stop kidding around, this isn't funny!" Private Josh Maxwell, newly initiated.



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Posted 04 June 2005 - 11:51 AM

Name of this text is "Landing Pad"

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LANDING PAD
X-Net://Pegasus.net/Base/Facilities/Landing Pad

Our landing pads have been designed to allow versatile storage of all X-Corps’ aircraft. Regular maintenance and combat repairs can be carried out in this 2500m2  facility using the integrated maintenance bay. Flooring grills are used throughout the facility to aid in cleanup; oils and other waste fluids are collected and filtered for proper disposal. Standard refueling procedures are carried out using shielded fuel storage tanks, allowing us to top off an aircraft without fear of fuel leaks and explosions. In addition to a reinforced outer casing, each tank has a flexible Kevlar internal bladder with fire retardant gel between the bladder and the outer casing.

Changed "flexible" to "versatile"; "flexible storage" makes me think of a rubbery storage case rather than a multi-use facility. Also, "versatile" seems to be a more accurate term.

Each landing pad includes a scissor lift platform to raise aircraft to the surface for external take off and landings. While it is possible for our top pilots to perform VTOLs from within the facility, this is considered an excessive risk and could be impossible for a damaged aircraft. The lift is operated by hydraulic presses located under the facility floor, and a ratcheted safety joint in the scissors keeps the ramp from falling in case of total hydraulic failure. The hangar roof is leveled with the landing pad on the surface, and retracts along the facility ceiling using recessed tracks. At full extension the lift is flush with the surface and does not damage the landing gear during take off and landing. The landing pad's external doors consist of reinforced concrete, and is surface camouflaged to match the surrounding area. While capable of supporting a significant amount of weight, these doors might be a potential weak point in our bases’ defense. Once the lift is flush with the surface, the aircraft can follow standard take-off procedures, using VTOL or a built-in catapult launcher from the surface.

Moved one instance of "scissor" from the second sentence to the first to prevent some repetition and vagueness; some people might think the lift platform and the scissor lift are two different things.

Added "external" to further contrast against the "from within the facility" line.

The purple text doesn't make sense now that the facility is called a "landing pad". Suggest deletion.


Note: Due to recent hazing of recruits, infrared sensors have been installed along the edge of the lift platform and aimed at the ceiling to detect any objects hanging off the edge of the lift and stop its ascent . This is to prevent possible equipment damage or amputation as the lift reaches surface level. Personnel must clear the lift prior to activation.

“It's pretty high up here, Jackson! I can hardly see you down there. Hey, stop the lift before it reaches the top; the bay doors are still closed! Stop kidding around, this isn't funny!" Private Josh Maxwell, newly initiated.

Made minor tweaks to the fluff text to make it sound more conversational (imho, of course :P).

Edited the text and comments relating to the 2500 sq. meter area. Standard facilities are 25m x 25m (625 sq. meters), this one is 50m x 50m (2500 sq. meters).

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LANDING PAD
X-Net://Pegasus.net/Base/Facilities/Landing Pad

Our landing pads have been designed to allow versatile storage of all our aircraft. Regular maintenance and combat repairs can be carried out in this 900m2 facility using the integrated maintenance bay. Flooring grills are used throughout the facility to aid in cleanup; oils and other waste fluids are collected and filtered for proper disposal. Standard refueling procedures are carried out using shielded fuel storage tanks, allowing us to top off an aircraft without fear of fuel leaks and explosions. In addition to a reinforced outer casing, each tank has a flexible Kevlar internal bladder with fire retardant gel between the bladder and the outer casing.

Each landing pad includes a scissor lift platform to raise aircraft to the surface for external take off and landings. While it is possible for our top pilots to perform VTOLs from within the facility, this is considered an excessive risk and could be impossible for a damaged aircraft. The lift is operated by hydraulic presses located under the facility floor, and a ratcheted safety joint in the scissors keeps the ramp from falling in case of total hydraulic failure. The hangar roof is leveled with the landing pad on the surface, and retracts along the facility ceiling using recessed tracks. At full extension the lift is flush with the surface and does not damage the landing gear during take off and landing. The landing pad's external doors consist of reinforced concrete, and are surface camouflaged to match the surrounding area. While capable of supporting a significant amount of weight, these doors might be a potential weak point in our bases’ defense. Once the lift is flush with the surface, the aircraft can follow standard take-off procedures, using VTOL or a built-in catapult launcher from the surface.

Note: Due to recent hazing of recruits, infrared sensors have been installed along the edge of the lift platform and aimed at the ceiling to detect any objects hanging off the edge of the lift and stop its ascent. This is to prevent possible equipment damage or amputation as the lift reaches surface level. Personnel must clear the lift prior to activation.

“It's pretty high up here, Jackson! I can hardly see you down there. Hey, stop the lift before it reaches the top; the bay doors are still closed! Stop kidding around, this isn't funny!" Private Josh Maxwell, newly initiated.