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The large beasts known as Raptors terrorists
are frequently seen in terror missions or and
Alien bases mindlessly serving their Satyrian masters. They appear to be devoid of any emotions, but seem to take save for
an unearthly delight in tearing the enemy into shreds and feasting on its remains. Although appearing large and clumsy, the Raptors are actually extremely fast and agile creatures.
The Raptor's intelligence was found to be somewhat limited. Although neural activities were very low in the cerebral cortex, particularly the frontal lobe, they were found to be particularly
intense in the cerebellum. This shows that although cultural, intellectual, and creative aspects of the Raptor species are virtually nonexistent, the basic instinctual impulses are very well developed: muscle growth, reflexes, and balance are extremely refined. It is not wise, however, to simply dismiss a Raptor as stupid,;
its natural cunning instinct,
or perhaps telepathic commands from a higher caste; Raptors have been known to stealthily ambush X-Corps patrols and catch them off guard, either wiping out the teams themselves, or creating a diversion that allows their Satyrian counterparts to seize an advantage within the chaos of death screams and torn flesh.
"Wilkins, get over here and cover my flank! One of those Raptors just went around that building...Wilkins? Wilkins! Respond, rookie! If I have to turn around... Hey, Wilkins where did you g-...Mother of...Noooooo [unintelligible]" -Last transmission from Corporal Nicholas Beauchesne.
The Raptor's physical form in itself appears to be very simple, consisting only of a small abdomen, two massive legs, and
a head. In addition to this is and
an elongated tail to serve as a counterbalance to its bizarre physique. Although the Raptor has no arms, this its
lack of dexterous appendages is more than compensated for by their its
enormous crushing jaws and razor sharp fangs. This makes it obvious that Raptors are definitely not engineers.
Their bodies are also covered in a thick mantle of fur. Our scientists have discovered that the natural oils that coat the fur are highly combustible. Our knowledge about their origins is very limited and is a subject of pure speculation, but researchers unanimously conclude that their nature is predatory.One peculiarity of Raptors is that when places under Peculiarly,
ultrasound analysis detects,
to be two fully functional hearts can be detected
. This finding along with, and
the amount of damage that is required to significantly wound one of these creatures,
us to believe that the creature known as the Raptor
not only possesses two hearts, but two pairs of lungs, and basically two sets
of what anything
ould call “vital” organs. Only the most severe of wounds will can
bring one of these horrific creatures down; because of the redundant organ systems, anything short of incapacitating damage, as the backup organs will keep it alive unless they are all thoroughly incapacitated would allow the Raptor to continue functioning with little apparent effect
. Multiple sets of vital organs serve other advantages as well: Raptors can sprint for long distances without growing tired, as their vital organs "cycle" to keep its body operating at maximum efficiency. Whether this feature is naturally evolved or is a feat of Alien genetic
engineering will be addressed in a Raptor autopsy is not known at this point. This is still a supposition and has to be corroborated by the autopsy
. Changed in case the player has already researched the Raptor autopsy.
In summary, Raptors are fast, deadly, and aggressive predators that cannot be reasoned with and will stop at nothing to ensure the destruction of any Human that stands in their path. Raptors should be considered high priority highly dangerous?
targets and eradicated when any opportunity presents itself.
"It was a [expletive deleted] mess, that's what it was. Ya ou scientist-types pencilnecks
have no friggin’
idea what all the
[expletive deleted] we us
soldiers go through! You’d think t
hose gigantic freaks w
ould be slower than molasses due to lookin’ at
their size. Boy Christ
, were we in for a surprise when we got caught right in the [expletive deleted] middle! Those other
Aliens blazing away with their rifles, and those [expletive deleted] monsters behind us devouring eatin’
our men alive...we lost a lot of good men, I tell 'ya [expletive deleted]
..." - Ex-Sergeant Ralph Toren, stationed at Sunny Hills Psychiatric Center pending evaluation.Changed "scientist-types" to "pencilnecks" to match soldier slang in other fluffs. Changed the language to try to make the guy less coherent.