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#1 Kikanaide

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Posted 07 June 2004 - 12:26 PM

Hello again,

So here's my second try at this CTD stuff. Comments and suggestions, please.

Incidentally, the internet situation still sucks, so I'm at work posting this, and access will be...sporadic at best. All input will be evaluated eventually, it just might take a bit, so please be patient.

Anyone have an idea for fluff? I prefer humorous in an under-stated way...preferably not stuff that is the equivalent of people getting kicked in the...

Just a quick question though...did anyone ever use plasma rifles?

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Edit: Newer version below. Old one left for reference.

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Posted 07 June 2004 - 12:36 PM

"Well, it doesn't matter what everybody this thing is. How can plasma, nothing more then pathetic hot air, be used as a weapon? Sigh, i think i better stick with my good old [pistol]." ~Plasma Riffle specialist before the interduction of the rifle.

as for the riffle text, it seems to look a bit too generic. I mean, it OUGHT to have some super cool special feature that cannot be found in the heavy gun or the pistol. Like a psionic amplifing sniper scope. :)

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Posted 08 June 2004 - 09:37 PM

Something about how when teh explosive plasma slams into the target, it instantly starts ripping the target to pieces, atom by atom, resulting in a fast, painful, and explosive death :D
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Posted 09 June 2004 - 08:18 AM

It's unfortunate that I don't know any real advantage to the plasma rifle, and that I think is what you are reading in the text as far as it being "generic." I don't like putting stuff into the text (such as psionic sniper scopes) that don't have gameplay effect or models... So I'm stuck with the fact that though I did occasionally use plasma pistols as backup weapons for my heavy support group, I never touched plasma rifles, using laser rifles or heavy plasma as standard issue. Because it was a very versatile weapon...but not particularly good at anything.

I could instead follow blehm's suggestion and speak briefly on the effect of the plasma striking the target. It would be of sufficiently high energy to tear atoms out of their current position, disrupting the target on a molecular level (as well as possibly combining/changing the nuclei of atoms). Then I could mention how unlikely it is that these effects be noticed, because the rediculous temperatures will (on a macro scale) inflict burns so painful and destructive as to remove almost all evidence.
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Posted 09 June 2004 - 09:39 AM

I would suggest focusing on the jack-of-all-trades function of the rifle, that it's versatile, has more punch than the pistol and doesn't weigh you down like the heavy. It can be tough, being the middle child...

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Posted 10 June 2004 - 09:52 AM

Thanks for the suggestion, Breunor. Here's the new version, complete with paragraph incorporating that idea. I'm still thinking about the fluff...I had an idea for it yesterday, but have lost it. Failing recall, I'll post mikker's unless anyone else has ideas...

Part 2...I can't spend much time on the internet right now...what happened to the participation in this forum? The alpha release?

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Posted 10 June 2004 - 05:40 PM

This is my proofread version. Please check it for mistakes by me Bruenor

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Posted 14 June 2004 - 07:39 AM

I'm perfectly happy with the changes. Thanks, Blehm.

Still clueless on the fluff text. Thinking about moving the plasma pistol clip text into plasma rifle clip, and putting MagicAndy's suggestion for the first part on this rifle... Or else maybe we could do one of those fancy pop-up add-on things after we figure out how those work.

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Posted 29 June 2004 - 10:56 AM

So I know this is supposedly done, but in researching the heavy plasma issue, I ran across the information showing I had made a factual mistake in the writeup. I apologize for that, and have corrected it in this version. I also made a minor change to the first paragraph by toning down the business language and stuffiness. It's not gone, mind you...after all, it's still me writing it :)

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-------- Below this point has been added & edited by RustedSoul --------------

the parts Kikanaide has changed have been highlighted in BLUE , the changes are important, the rest of the document matches the proofread one.

The plasma rifle is the alien equivalent of the light rifle, and is a staple weapon in their invasion. Powerful, fast, and accurate, this rifle outperforms Terran-based weaponry in every category…except cost. This weapon is also very versatile, and is suitable for use as an entry weapon, long range support, and open-area combat. The manufacture of ammunition for this weapon requires Xenium, but it is predicted that if X-corps remains successful in missions, enough weapons will be recovered to ensure that no shortage will be encountered.

The plasma rifle itself bears all the marks of plasma technology - magneto-dynamic prongs on the front, feeder tubes on the sides, and the grip-glove favored by the aliens. A handle is attached near the front of the weapon, allowing for increased stability and therefore accuracy when firing. The weapon can be fired one-handed, but due to the size of the weapon, accuracy is significantly reduced when used in this manner. The burst fired is capable of considerable damage, primarily from the incredible heat but direct contact will transfer sufficient energy to rip atoms and molecules apart.

The three-prong design and long barrel offers increased accuracy, collimation, and plasma capacity over the smaller pistol design. The larger plasma generation chamber allows for more powerful blasts. The rifle is suitable for a variety of functions, as it is light enough to be carried by weaker agents, but powerful enough to take down the most aliens with only a few hits. As an entry weapon, the most significant advantage is the added damage when compared with the plasma pistol, as both weapons have similar firing speeds. At longer range, the weapon performs admirably as well, though lacking the penetrating power of heavier alien weapons.

With the advent of this new technology, it is highly recommended that the X-corps begin using an all-plasma approach, delegating less advanced weaponry to non-critical missions and all other non-explosive payload to the scrap pile. A word of caution however: due to our proven inability to manufacture Xenium, it may be wise to cache a few of the less advanced weapons, in the case of clip shortages.

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Posted 29 June 2004 - 08:11 PM

Did you use my one though, and build on it? Because i alreadyproofed it, and it has already had its final version posted(crud, i should post this in the meeting room)
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Posted 30 June 2004 - 05:11 AM

i'll handle this one on my end

CTD is completed, Topic closed!

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Posted 07 February 2005 - 01:32 PM

Argh. I can tell that being sick really diminishes my ability to concentrate and proofread. :( I’m bored out of my mind, but there’s little I can do. Bleah. But enough of my complaining.

FYI, the plasma rifle and stun baton topics are both locked, so I'm posting here instead.

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p.s. added [brackets] and capitalizations of “Alien” haven’t been denoted.

[PLASMA RIFLE]
X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Weapons/[Plasma Rifle]


The [plasma rifle] is the Alien-equivalent of the light rifle, and it is a staple weapon in their invasion.  Powerful, fast, and accurate, this rifle outperforms Terran-based weaponry in every category…except cost what kind of cost?  Monetary, resources, labor?  Also, the plasma rifles can’t “outperform,” but they can be more expensive, more labor-intensive, etc..  This weapon is also very versatile, and is suitable for use as an entry weapon Not sure what this means..., long range support, and open-area combat.  The manufacture of ammunition for this weapon requires Xenium-122, but it is predicted that if X-corps remains successful in missions, enough weapons will be recovered to ensure that no shortage will be encountered. A little confusing- the first part talks about ammo, the second about weapons.  Suggest:  ...requires Xenium-122, but if the X-Corps continues its success in its missions, the we predict the salvage operations should recover enough [plasma rifle clips] for our purposes.

The [plasma rifle] itself bears all the the hallmarks of plasma technology – anterior magneto-dynamic prongs on the front, lateral feeder tubes on the sides, and the grip-glove favored by the Aliens Alien physiologies.  A handle is attached near the front of the weapon, allowing allows for increased stability and therefore accuracy when firing.  The weapon can be fired one-handed, but due to the size of the weapon, accuracy is significantly reduced when used in this manner.  The burst fired mode is capable of considerable damage, primarily from the incredible heat but direct contact will transfer sufficient energy to rip atoms and molecules apart. This last sentence sounds a little weird to me- I’d think the demolecularization is the primary source of the damage?  Suggest: “The burst mode is capable of dealing considerable damage in a short time; the incredible heat from mere glancing shots and possibility of demolecularization from direct hits make the [plasma rifle] a formidable weapon indeed."

The three-prong design and longer barrel offers increased accuracy, collimation, and plasma capacity over the smaller [plasma pistol] design.  The , and the larger plasma generation chamber allows for more powerful blasts.  The [plasma rifle] is suitable for a variety of functions, as it is light enough : its light weight allows it to be carried by weaker agents, but it is powerful enough to take down the most Aliens with only a few hits.  As an entry weapon ??, the most significant advantage is the added its enhanced damage when compared with over the [plasma pistol], as both weapons have similar firing speeds.  At longer ranges, the weapon performs admirably as well, though lacking the penetrating power of heavier Alien weapons.

With the advent of this new technology, it is highly recommended that the X-corps begin using an all-plasma approach augment its arsenal to take advantage of the superior capabilities of plasma weaponry and relegate its less advanced weaponry to non-critical missions., delegating less advanced weaponry to non-critical missions and all other non-explosive payload to the scrap pileA word of caution however: due to our proven inability to manufacture Xenium, it may be wise to cache a few of the less advanced weapons, in the case of clip shortages  However, due of our inability to manufacture Xenium-122, plasma-based weaponry should not be used recklessly, and it would be wise to keep several non-Xenium intensive weapons in stock for emergencies.

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Posted 07 February 2005 - 09:58 PM

Sorry about that, topics opened and merged :)

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[PLASMA RIFLE]
X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Weapons/[Plasma Rifle]

The [plasma rifle] is the Alien-equivalent of the [light rifle], and it is a staple weapon in their invasion. Powerful, fast, and accurate, this rifle outperforms Terran weaponry in every category, except cost; the construction of a [plasma rifle] is significantly more expensive to us than that of a [light rifle]. This weapon is also very versatile, and is very suitable for use as a close quarters weapon, long range support, or open-area combat.

removed the part about the ammo, it’s got no place here, the ammo has it’s own entry. Changed "entry weapon" for "close quarters" as I think that's what was intended

The [plasma rifle] itself bears the hallmarks of plasma technology – anterior magneto-dynamic prongs, lateral feeder tubes, and the grip-glove favored by Alien physiologies. A handle attached near the front of the weapon allows for increased stability and accuracy. The weapon can be fired one-handed, but due to the size of the weapon, accuracy is significantly reduced when used in this manner. The burst-mode is capable of considerable damage, primarily from the incredible heat, but direct contact will transfer sufficient energy to rip flesh or even armor apart with ease.

demolecularization and splitting atoms sounds weird, what about the energy released when you split atoms?, you’d expect a nuclear explosion because you hit something with the plasma rifle

The three-prong design and longer barrel offer increased accuracy, collimation, and plasma capacity over the smaller [plasma pistol] design, and the larger plasma generation chamber allows for more powerful blasts. The [plasma rifle] is suitable for a variety of functions: its light weight allows it to be carried by agents with average or less than average physical strength, but it is powerful enough to take down most Aliens creatures with only a few hits. As a close quarters weapons, the most significant advantage is its enhanced damage over the [plasma pistol], as both weapons have similar firing speeds. At longer ranges, the weapon performs admirably as well, though lacking the penetrating power of heavier Alien weapons.

With the advent of this new technology, it is highly recommended that the X-corps augment its arsenal to take advantage of the superior capabilities of plasma weaponry and relegate its less advanced weaponry to non-critical missions. However, due of our inability to manufacture Xenium-122, plasma-based weaponry should not be used recklessly, and it would be wise to keep several non-Xenium intensive weapons in stock for emergencies.

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Posted 08 March 2005 - 04:15 PM

Aw cripes, just found that the plasma pistol is NOT a prerequisite for the plasma rifle on the tech tree. :Rant: I have changed the text accordingly.

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[PLASMA RIFLE]
X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Weapons/[Plasma Rifle]

The [plasma rifle] is the Alien-equivalent of the [light rifle], and it is a staple weapon in their arsenal. Powerful, fast, and accurate, this rifle the [plasma rifle] vastly outperforms its Terran weaponry counterpart in every category, but at a steep price; the construction its manufacturing process of a is significantly more time-consuming and more expensive to us than that of a the [light rifle]. Nevertheless, the [plasma rifle]'s versatility makes it quite This weapon is also very versatile, and is very suitable for use as a for close quarters weapon, long range support, or and open-area combat.

The [plasma rifle] itself bears all the hallmarks of plasma technology – anterior magneto-dynamic prongs, lateral feeder tubes, strategically placed high-capacity heat sinks, and the grip-glove favored by Alien physiologies. A handle attached near the front of the weapon allows for increased stability and accuracy. Although the weapon can be fired with one hand, but due to the size of the weapon, accuracy is significantly reduced when it is used in this manner. The burst mode is capable of dealing considerable damage in a short time firing three deadly shots in rapid succession; the incredible heat from mere glancing shots and possibility of demolecularization from direct hits make the [plasma rifle] a formidable weapon indeed.

Changed the "considerable damage in a short time" because the plasma rifle is still deadly when it isn't on burst mode. Demolecularization doesn't automatically imply atomic fission; it just means molecules are broken up into their component atoms.

The three-prong design and longer barrel offer increased accuracy, collimation, and plasma capacity over the smaller [plasma pistol] designs, and the larger plasma generation chamber allows for more powerful blasts. The [plasma rifle] is suitable for a variety of functions; its light weight allows it to be carried by agents with average to sub-average or less than average physical strength, but in spite of this, it remains powerful enough to take down most Aliens creatures with only a few hits. As a close quarters weapons, the [plasma rifle]'s enhanced damage is its most significant advantage over its smaller cousins is its enhanced damage over the [plasma pistol], as both since these weapons seem to have comparable rates of fire. At longer ranges, the weapon performs admirably as well, though it lacks the penetrating power of heavier Alien weapons.

The clip for the [plasma rifle] itself is similar to those of other plasma-based weaponry, but analysis of its contents will require separate research. The clip appears to contain two different solutions, and preliminary analysis suggests the presence of Xenium in one compartment.

With the advent of an X-Corps-manufacturable version of the [plasma rifle], it is highly recommended that the X-Corps augment its arsenal to take advantage of the superior capabilities of plasma weaponry and relegate its less advanced weaponry to non-critical missions. However, due of our inability to manufacture Xenium-122, plasma-based weaponry should not be used recklessly, and it would be wise to stock several non-Xenium intensive weapons for emergencies.

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[PLASMA RIFLE]
X-Net://Pegasus.net/Alien/Weapons/[Plasma Rifle]

The [plasma rifle] is the Alien-equivalent of the [light rifle], and it is a staple weapon in their arsenal. Powerful, fast, and accurate, the [plasma rifle] vastly outperforms its Terran counterpart in every category, but at a steep price; its manufacturing process is significantly more time-consuming and more expensive than that of the [light rifle]. Nevertheless, the [plasma rifle]'s versatility makes it quite suitable for close quarters, long range, and open-area combat.

The [plasma rifle] bears all the hallmarks of plasma technology – anterior magneto-dynamic prongs, lateral feeder tubes, strategically placed high-capacity heat sinks, and the grip-glove favored by Alien physiologies. A handle attached near the front of the weapon allows for increased stability and accuracy. Although the weapon can be fired with one hand, accuracy is significantly reduced when it is used in this manner. The burst mode is capable of firing three deadly shots in rapid succession; the incredible heat from mere glancing shots and possibility of demolecularization from direct hits make the [plasma rifle] a formidable weapon indeed.

The three-prong design and longer barrel offer increased accuracy, collimation, and plasma capacity over the smaller pistol designs, and the larger plasma generation chamber allows for more powerful blasts. The [plasma rifle] is suitable for a variety of functions; its light weight allows it to be carried by agents with average to sub-average physical strength, but in spite of this, it remains powerful enough to take down most Aliens creatures with only a few hits. As a close quarters weapon, the [plasma rifle]'s enhanced damage is its most significant advantage over its smaller cousins since these weapons seem to have comparable rates of fire. At longer ranges, the weapon performs admirably as well, though it lacks the penetrating power of heavier Alien weapons.

The clip for the [plasma rifle] itself is similar to those of other plasma-based weaponry, but analysis of its contents will require separate research. The clip appears to contain two different solutions, and preliminary analysis suggests the presence of Xenium in one compartment.

With the advent of an X-Corps-manufacturable version of the [plasma rifle], it is highly recommended that the X-Corps augment its arsenal to take advantage of the superior capabilities of plasma weaponry and relegate its less advanced weaponry to non-critical missions. However, due of our current inability to manufacture Xenium-122, plasma-based weaponry should not be used recklessly, and it would be wise to stock several non-Xenium intensive weapons for emergencies.

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