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This device consists of state-of-the art parts. Sure it does. It is X-Corps equipment! I feel, that this sentence should be merged with the following sentences, or placed somewhere else. It's a bad sentence to start this §.
Its The most important part (...device, thing, whatever. maybe "signal" or "information -source") one is the Receiver module, a complex internal structure that captures EM Radiation and Ultrasound and analyzes both their intensity as well as polarization angle (whenever applicable). A Terahertz Radiation emitter provides the ability of more precise detection in a larger range. In addition, an InfraSense™ module detects infrasound and thus - like seismic vibrations, which proves extremely useful whenever obstacles block other kinds of input. Then,All data is sent streamed? to the Computer module that processes the information. An Organic Light Emitting Diode (OLED) screen guarantees clear display and power-saving operation. A high-capacitance lithium battery provides energy for five hours of endless operation. Additionally, a kinetic dynamo takes advantage of the soldier’s movement and converts kinetic energy into electricity, which charges the battery.
As soon as the Receiver detects motion, it directs the T-Ray emitter to send a powerful radiation beam in the vicinity of the possible target to obtain more precise readings. Terahertz radiation, popularly called "T-Rays", can penetrate a wide variety of non-conducting materials like clothing, paper, cardboard, wood, masonry, plastic and ceramics without much absorption, so information such as angle, shape, mass and velocity can be extrapolated with much higher precision than when using exclusively EM radiation. Wahh! T-Rays are EM radiation! You want to say, the adding of the EM (T-Ray) Module allows more precise detection then just with the US or IS modules, I know, but it doesn't read that way. The improvement comes from the fact that T-Rays have higher frequency, please rephrase this sentence. "the improvement comes from" sounds really odd and the accuracy is proportional with the frequency. Maybe you could merge it... like: "Using high frequency waves - like T-Rays, allows a more accurate measurement... Alas, due to the technical limitations of the device, we are unable to utilize most of this information. Nevertheless, this fact does not demote the T-Rays module, which is still an important input feed. haha... this sounds like you - you kafros - are defending your T-Ray module! Maybe think of a rephrasing?
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Maybe I should've explained the colors at once...
Edited by Mad, 27 January 2006 - 09:50 AM.