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#51 Mad

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Posted 14 April 2008 - 12:46 PM

The way it stands now, "Its malevolent aura still striking fear within the very souls of the survivors." is an incomplete sentence. I switched "striking" to "strikes" which is a complete sentence. If you want to use the wording as it is, I suggest combining it with another sentence or rewording. Otherwise, forget what I said. :blink2:

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Ah, I see, that i kind of "overread", since you also changed Its to It's which is obviously a bit strange. Agreed about the sentence not beeing a real one. That change is a good one. Sorry for the miscommunication.
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#52 Zombie

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Posted 14 April 2008 - 03:32 PM

No problem. The apostrophe was a typo on my part and that probably compounded the issue. Sorry. :blush1:

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#53 RustedSoul

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Posted 14 April 2008 - 05:51 PM

Instead of:

Its malevolent aura still striking fear within the very souls of the survivors.

I was thinking something along the lines of this:

It's malevolent aura still strikes fear within the very souls of the survivors.

Rusty, is this what you were after? :)

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It sure was, matey, cheers! :)