Ah, I see, that i kind of "overread", since you also changed Its to It's which is obviously a bit strange. Agreed about the sentence not beeing a real one. That change is a good one. Sorry for the miscommunication.
The way it stands now, "Its malevolent aura still striking fear within the very souls of the survivors." is an incomplete sentence. I switched "striking" to "strikes" which is a complete sentence. If you want to use the wording as it is, I suggest combining it with another sentence or rewording. Otherwise, forget what I said.
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Posted 14 April 2008 - 12:46 PM
Of course I have gone mad with power! It would be completely ridiculous to go mad without power!
And no, this is not a quote from the Simpson's movie, I want it on paper, that I actually wrote that quite some time before the movie came out.
Posted 14 April 2008 - 03:32 PM
Zombie: Empirical data's your only man, when formulating a research plan.
A soldier's death is never in vain if it makes the formula more plain.
A few dozen make a better case for refining that third decimal place.
They call me Zombie because I don't sleep, as I slowly struggle to climb this heap,
of corpses, data points, and trials, but from the top - I'll see for miles!
Posted 14 April 2008 - 05:51 PM
Instead of:I was thinking something along the lines of this:
Its malevolent aura still striking fear within the very souls of the survivors.Rusty, is this what you were after?
It's malevolent aura still strikes fear within the very souls of the survivors.
It sure was, matey, cheers!