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Posted 25 August 2005 - 10:03 PM

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In the early years of the Gulf Reformation Wars of the late Twentieth Century, the first Remotely Operated Vehicles saw military use. These early models had few, if any weapons and completely lacked autonomy software, instead being directly controlled by a soldier nearby. The viciousness of the Gulf Reformation War combined with advancements in composites and political fallout from human losses pushed the military ROV into the forefront of both development and deployment.


The peak of current ROV technology is the Modular Tank Chassis, built of carbon-reinforced, high-impact plastic for lightness, giving it an unmatched speed and agility. Armored with fifteen layers of ceramic composite mesh, the MTC is well protected against attack, and the latest hydrogen fuel cells give the MTC its power. The raw hydrogen itself is stored in a nanotube containment block, preventing explosion even if the MTC itself is destroyed. Twin composite treads are laced with carbon-filament for strength, and when combined with the MTC's liquid-magnetic suspension, allows it to travel over virtually any terrain.


Although safe and fully autonomous combat support vehicles are still beyond current technology, a soldier in even the heaviest firefight can easily control the semi-autonomous MTC without interfering in the operator’s other duties. The AlphaWave neural command system allows the operator to literally command the MTC with his thoughts. Any simple command (Scout, Attack, Defend, Cover-Fire, etc.) can be sent in the blink of an eye by a well trained controller, and the mil-spec independent action software will interpret and execute the command instantly. For operators unwilling to undergo the strenuous neural link training process, an arm mounted control pad is available.

The single hardpoint of the MTC can accommodate a variety of modular turrets, from conventional weapon systems to custom designed battlefield support equipment. An obvious addition to the MTC’s complement of weapons was the adaptation of a portable rocket launcher. With the extended range and destructive capabilities of eight High-Explosive Rockets added to the speed and maneuverability of the MTC, a truly formidable fighting machine was born. With the addition of augmented sensor nets, and limited smart-missile enhancements, the -02M is deadly to ground troops, and a serious threat even to other armored vehicles. The parabolic blast deflector allows the T-02M to retain launch capability in tight quarters, dispersing the blast so effectively that soldiers standing behind the launching missile would remain unharmed.

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Posted 26 August 2005 - 04:35 AM

Tried my best... first draft :)

Edit: Speed of tank rom 30 km/h to 45 km/h

ROCKET TANK
X-Net://Pegasus.net/XCAPS/MTC T-02M

In the early years of the Gulf Reformation Wars of the late Twentieth Century, the first Remotely Operated Vehicles saw military use. These early models had few, if any weapons and completely lacked autonomy software, instead being directly controlled by a “pilot” in a remote controlling center. The viciousness of the Gulf Reformation War combined with advancements in composites and political fallout from human losses pushed the military ROV into the forefront of both development and deployment.

The peak of current ROV technology is the Modular Tank Chassis, built of carbon-reinforced, high-impact plastic for lightness, giving it an unmatched speed and agility. Armored with fifteen layers of ceramic composite mesh, the MTC is well protected against attack with standard ammunition. Powered by hydrogen fuel cells of the latest generation the MTC can reach top in field speeds up to 45 km/h for about 24 hours. To prevent human losses by explosion when a MTC is destroyed, the hydrogen is stored in a nanotube containment block. Twin composite treads are laced with carbon-filament for strength, and, combined with the MTC's liquid-magnetic suspension, allow high travel speeds in virtually any terrain.

Although safe and fully autonomous combat support vehicles are still beyond current technology, a soldier in even the heaviest firefight can easily control the semi-autonomous MTC without interfering in the operator’s other duties. Directed via a highly sophisticated control console the MTC can be maneuvered from out every X-Corps transport ship. Since the MTC is shipping with the latest sensor technology coupled to a virtual reality device within the ship its extended range of view allows the pilot to effectively support the ground troops in every situation. As simplification for the controller simple command macros (Scout, Attack, Defend, Cover-Fire) were implemented to ensure the safe and effective controlling of several MTCs at one time. They can be sent in the blink of an eye by a well trained controller, and the mil-spec independent action software will interpret and execute the command instantly.

The single hardpoint of the MTC can accommodate a variety of modular turrets, from conventional weapon systems to custom designed battlefield support equipment. An obvious addition to the MTC’s complement of weapons was the adaptation of a portable rocket launcher. With the extended range and destructive capabilities of eight High-Explosive Rockets added to the speed and maneuverability of the MTC, a truly formidable fighting machine was born. Completed by an extra augmented sensor nets, and limited smart-missile enhancements, the T-02M is deadly to ground troops, and a serious threat even to other armored vehicles. The parabolic blast deflector allows the T-02M to retain launch capability in tight quarters, dispersing the blast so effectively that soldiers standing behind or in the vicinity of the launching missile remain unharmed.
The MTC T-02M is a desperate needed supportive system for our troops.


“I can see something you can’t see… surprise.”
X-Corps Pilot teasing the in-field commanding officer while training with the new MTC T-02M ground support unit.


Edited by Mad, 26 August 2005 - 06:03 AM.

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Posted 06 September 2005 - 10:32 AM

CT for the MTC see CTD - Cannon XCAPS, X-Net Entry ( http://www.xcomufo.c...=0 )

MTC ROCKET TANK
X-Net://Pegasus.net/XCAPS/MTC T-02M
An obvious addition to the MTCs complement of weapons was the adaptation of a portable rocket launcher. With the destructive capabilities of eight High-Explosive Rockets added to the speed and maneuverability of the MTC, a truly formidable fighting machine was born. Based on the T-01Cs sensor equipment, which was reprogrammed to perform a limited missile guidance setting a precise launching vector, the T-02M is capable of firing its high explosive STS Rockets with high accuracy in a 45 degree operation angle without moving the base. Keeping in mind the rockets enormous blast radius it is deadly to enemy ground troops positioned in loose groups even when not hitting the target wit full precision, and a serious threat to other armored vehicles. The automatic reload mechanism permits a fully remote controlled operation leaving the troops with more than just a heavy weapon platform.
Although the parabolic blast deflector allows the T-02M to retain launch capability in tight quarters, dispersing the blast so effectively that soldiers standing behind or in the vicinity of the launching rocket remain unharmed, it is not recommended for in-building use since the danger of casualties should not be underestimated. When fighting in open terrain this weapon system has all arguments on its side.
The MTC T-02M is a desperate needed heavy supportive system for our troops, freeing the soldiers of the burden a man-carried rocket launcher imposes them with.


“…how I stopped worrying and learned loving the MTC”
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Posted 12 September 2005 - 04:37 AM

“…how I stopped worrying and learned loving the MTC”
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only thing I can find in this one: the correct analogous quote would be
"...how I learned to stop worrying and love the MTC"

(or perhaps you wanted to change it? but I think it sounds more smooth the original way.)

Edited by Moriarty, 12 September 2005 - 04:51 AM.

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Posted 12 September 2005 - 06:26 AM

only thing I can find in this one: the correct analogous quote would be
"...how I learned to stop worrying and love the MTC"

(or perhaps you wanted to change it? but I think it sounds more smooth the original way.)

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Posted 20 September 2005 - 03:25 PM

Changed names

XCAP, ROCKET
X-Net://Pegasus.net/XCAPS/XCAP, Rocket
An obvious addition to the XCAPs complement of weapons was the adaptation of a portable rocket launcher. With the destructive capabilities of eight High-Explosive Rockets added to the speed and maneuverability of the XCAP, a truly formidable fighting machine was born. Based on the Cannon XCAPs sensor equipment, which was reprogrammed to perform a limited missile guidance setting a precise launching vector, the T-02M aka Rocket XCAP is capable of firing its high explosive STS Rockets with high accuracy in a 45 degree operation angle without moving the base. Keeping in mind the rockets enormous blast radius it is deadly to enemy ground troops positioned in loose groups even when not hitting the target wit full precision, and a serious threat to other armored vehicles. The automatic reload mechanism permits a fully remote controlled operation leaving the troops with more than just a heavy weapon platform.
Although the parabolic blast deflector allows the Rocket XCAP to retain launch capability in tight quarters, dispersing the blast so effectively that soldiers standing behind or in the vicinity of the launching rocket remain unharmed, it is not recommended for in-building use since the danger of casualties should not be underestimated. When fighting in open terrain this weapon system has all arguments on its side.
The Rocket XCAP is a desperate needed heavy supportive system for our troops, freeing the soldiers of the burden a man-carried rocket launcher imposes them with.


“…how I learned to stop worrying and love the XCAP"
Sticker on X-Corps armor


Edited by Mad, 20 September 2005 - 03:59 PM.

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Posted 20 September 2005 - 11:40 PM

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XCAP, ROCKET
X-Net://Pegasus.net/XCAPS/XCAP, Rocket
An obvious addition to the XCAPs complement of weapons was the adaptation of a portable rocket launcher. With the destructive capabilities of eight High-Explosive Rockets added to the speed and maneuverability of the XCAP, a truly formidable fighting machine was born. Based on the Cannon XCAPs sensor equipment, which was reprogrammed to perform a limited missile guidance setting a precise launching vector, the T-02M aka Rocket XCAP is capable of firing its high explosive STS Rockets with high accuracy in a 45 degree operation angle without moving the base. Keeping in mind the rockets enormous blast radius it is deadly to enemy ground troops positioned in loose groups even when not hitting the target wit full precision, and a serious threat to other armored vehicles. The automatic reload mechanism permits a fully remote controlled operation leaving the troops with more than just a heavy weapon platform.
Although the parabolic blast deflector allows the Rocket XCAP to retain launch capability in tight quarters, dispersing the exhaust blast so effectively that soldiers standing behind or in the vicinity of the launching rocket remain unharmed, it is not recommended for in-building use since the danger of casualties from the rockets' explosions should not be underestimated. When fighting in open terrain this weapon system has all arguments on its side.
The Rocket XCAP is a desperately needed heavy supportive system for our troops, freeing the soldiers of the burden a man-carried rocket launcher imposes them with.


“…how I learned to stop worrying and love the XCAP"
Sticker on X-Corps armor


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Posted 27 September 2005 - 03:25 AM

since I'm out of ideas, I just repost Moriartys corrected version and hope that someone has some anotations. If not, I'm glad with this version and would recoment it for Phase 2

XCAP, ROCKET
X-Net://Pegasus.net/XCAPS/XCAP, Rocket
An obvious addition to the XCAPs complement of weapons was the adaptation of a portable rocket launcher. With the destructive capabilities of eight High-Explosive Rockets added to the speed and maneuverability of the XCAP, a truly formidable fighting machine was born. Based on the Cannon XCAPs sensor equipment, which was reprogrammed to perform a limited missile guidance setting a precise launching vector, the T-02M aka Rocket XCAP is capable of firing its high explosive STS Rockets with high accuracy in a 45 degree operation angle without moving the base. Keeping in mind the rockets enormous blast radius it is deadly to enemy ground troops positioned in loose groups even when not hitting the target wit full precision, and a serious threat to other armored vehicles. The automatic reload mechanism permits a fully remote controlled operation leaving the troops with more than just a heavy weapon platform.
Although the parabolic blast deflector allows the Rocket XCAP to retain launch capability in tight quarters, dispersing the exhaust blast so effectively that soldiers standing behind or in the vicinity of the launching rocket remain unharmed, it is not recommended for in-building use since the danger of casualties from the rockets' explosions should not be underestimated. When fighting in open terrain this weapon system has all arguments on its side.
The Rocket XCAP is a desperately needed heavy support system for our troops, freeing the soldiers of the burden a man-carried rocket launcher imposes them with.


“…how I learned to stop worrying and love the XCAP"
Sticker on X-Corps armor


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Posted 27 September 2005 - 01:30 PM

Two things : Mad, that link above is not working, and directs to the forum main screen.

Is this specifically for the rocket XCAP? Thus, there is one for every single variant? Because there is a considerable discrepancy between the original version and the so-called 'final version'. Is there going to be a generic XCAP thread, then a 'rocket version' bolt on or something? Because there is nothing in the last version about its history, or anything similar.
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Posted 27 September 2005 - 01:32 PM

The link above doesn't work probably because I've split the topics :)

And yes, there is an entry for the XCAP chassis and hover XCAP chassis, and one for every XCAP type.

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Posted 28 September 2005 - 09:41 PM

since I'm out of ideas, I just repost Moriartys corrected version and hope that someone has some anotations. If not, I'm glad with this version and would recoment it for Phase 2

There is no phase 2 :), and there is no proofreading atm.

XCAP, ROCKET
X-Net://Pegasus.net/XCAPS/XCAP, Rocket

Just Rocket, XCAP is implied since it's in the XCAPS category.

added to the speed and maneuverability of the XCAP, a truly formidable fighting machine was born.

How about "in addition to the speed and maneuverability natural of the XCAP, the destructive power of the XCAP rockets make this machine a very valuable asset on the battlefield"? "formidable fighting machine was born" sounds a bit too dramatic.

the T-02M aka Rocket XCAP is

Either use "... the T-02M Rocket XCAP..." or remove the aka and use "also known as".

capable of firing its high explosive STS Rockets with high accuracy in a 45 degree operation angle without moving the base.

SAS?

Keeping in mind the rockets enormous blast radius it is deadly to enemy ground troops positioned in loose groups even when not hitting the target wit full precision, and a serious threat to other armored vehicles.

"large", instead of "enormous".

The automatic reload mechanism permits a fully remote controlled operation leaving the troops with more than just a heavy weapon platform.

Trying to slip a HWP in here, aren't we? :rolleyes:

Although the parabolic blast deflector allows the Rocket XCAP to retain launch capability in tight quarters

parabolic blast deflector? that almost implies (at least at first read) that the XCAP has something to deflect incoming explosions, please clarify.

Very good =b

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Posted 29 September 2005 - 06:10 AM

capable of firing its high explosive STS Rockets with high accuracy in a 45 degree operation angle without moving the base.

SAS?

I don'know. Surface To Surface (as in http://www.acronymfi...ng=exact&page=7 ), or Surface Anti Surface as SAS?

Trying to slip a HWP in here, aren't we? :rolleyes:

:innocent:

Although the parabolic blast deflector allows the Rocket XCAP to retain launch capability in tight quarters

parabolic blast deflector? that almost implies (at least at first read) that the XCAP has something to deflect incoming explosions, please clarify.

So whats with "parabolic rocket jet deflector"?

Other anotations will be implemented in the next draw. Thx a lot! :)

Oh... and dipstick? :spank: (Attached File  lovedippy.jpg   6.21K   43 downloads) :P

Edited by Mad, 29 September 2005 - 09:20 AM.

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Posted 29 September 2005 - 09:19 AM

Slightly modified

XCAP, ROCKET
X-Net://Pegasus.net/XCAPS/Rocket
An obvious addition to the X-Corps Assault Platforms (XCAP) complement of weapons was the adaptation of a portable rocket launcher. With the destructive capabilities of eight High-Explosive Rockets added to the speed and maneuverability of the XCAP, the new model is a very valuable asset on the battlefield. Based on the Cannon XCAPs sensor equipment, which was reprogrammed to perform a limited missile guidance setting a precise launching vector, the T-02M also known as Rocket XCAP is capable of firing its high explosive STS Rockets with high accuracy in a 45 degree operation angle without moving the base. Keeping in mind the rockets large blast radius it is deadly to enemy ground troops positioned in loose groups even when not hitting the target wit full precision, and a serious threat to other armored vehicles. The automatic reload mechanism permits a fully remote controlled operation leaving the troops with much more than just a mobile heavy weapon system.
Although the parabolic rocket jet deflector allows the Rocket XCAP to retain launch capability in tight quarters, dispersing the exhaust blast so effectively that soldiers standing behind or in the vicinity of the launching rocket remain unharmed, it is not recommended for in-building use since the danger of casualties from the rockets' explosions should not be underestimated. When fighting in open terrain this weapon system has all arguments on its side.
The Rocket XCAP is a desperately needed heavy support system for our troops, freeing the soldiers of the burden a man-carried rocket launcher imposes them with.


“…how I learned to stop worrying and love the XCAP"
Sticker on X-Corps armor


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Posted 29 September 2005 - 10:12 AM

Oh... and dipstick?  :spank:  (Attached File  lovedippy.jpg   6.21K   43 downloads) :P

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What the heck is THAT? OMG

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Posted 29 September 2005 - 11:03 AM

Oh... and dipstick?  :spank:  (Attached File  lovedippy.jpg   6.21K   43 downloads) :P

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What the heck is THAT? OMG

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That my friend is the evidence to the disreputable deeds of the Dr. Dipstick... :P

Edited by Mad, 29 September 2005 - 11:03 AM.

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Posted 30 September 2005 - 07:12 AM

Excuse me, point your accusing finger to the head of the CTD, Professor Azrael. :innocent:

Anyhow, looking at the text, I cannot really such wrong with it, which is a shame- I like picking holes in people's texts.... :( buuuuuut 'with' is spelt 'w...i...t..H'

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Posted 30 September 2005 - 08:07 AM

Excuse me, point your accusing finger to the head of the CTD, Professor Azrael. :innocent:


Az? Really? well, then, both of you... :P :spank: :spank:

[...]  buuuuuut 'with' is spelt 'w...i...t..H'

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Posted 30 September 2005 - 08:18 AM

Keeping in mind the rockets large blast radius it is deadly to enemy ground troops positioned in loose groups even when not hitting the target wit full precision



Sorry to nitpick, but I had to find SOMETHING wrong with your work! =b
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Posted 30 September 2005 - 08:26 AM

Excuse me, point your accusing finger to the head of the CTD, Professor Azrael. :innocent:

Moi? shame on you for pointing that finger at me! *breaks dipstick's finger*

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Posted 30 September 2005 - 08:27 AM

Keeping in mind the rockets large blast radius it is deadly to enemy ground troops positioned in loose groups even when not hitting the target wit full precision



Sorry to nitpick, but I had to find SOMETHING wrong with your work! =b

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Oh, c'mon! :P

Moi? shame on you for pointing that finger at me! *breaks dipstick's finger*

Quiet! Both of you! Hmmm??? Who was it? Tell the uncle, or you'll both go to bed without supper! :P

Btw, Az, how was your test?

Edited by Mad, 30 September 2005 - 08:29 AM.

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Btw, Az, how was your test?

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Completed.

XCAP, ROCKET
X-Net://Pegasus.net/XCAPS/Rocket
An obvious addition to the X-Corps Assault Platforms (XCAP) complement of weapons was the adaptation of a portable rocket launcher. With the destructive capabilities of eight High-Explosive Rockets added to the speed and maneuverability of the XCAP, the new model is a very valuable asset on the battlefield. Based on the Cannon XCAPs sensor equipment, which was reprogrammed to perform a limited missile guidance setting a precise launching vector, the T-02M also known as Rocket XCAP is capable of firing its high explosive STS Rockets with high accuracy in a 45 degree operation angle without moving the base. Keeping in mind the rockets large blast radius it is deadly to enemy ground troops positioned in loose groups even when not hitting the target wit full precision, and a serious threat to other armored vehicles. The automatic reload mechanism permits a fully remote controlled operation leaving the troops with much more than just a mobile heavy weapon system.
Although the parabolic rocket jet deflector allows the Rocket XCAP to retain launch capability in tight quarters, dispersing the exhaust blast so effectively that soldiers standing behind or in the vicinity of the launching rocket remain unharmed, it is not recommended for in-building use since the danger of casualties from the rockets' explosions should not be underestimated. When fighting in open terrain this weapon system has all arguments on its side.
The Rocket XCAP is a desperately needed heavy support system for our troops, freeing the soldiers of the burden a man-carried rocket launcher imposes them with.


“…how I learned to stop worrying and love the XCAP"
Sticker on X-Corps armor



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Posted 03 December 2006 - 08:25 AM

Only for proofreading - please check consistency with other xcap CTs

XCAP, ROCKET
X-Net://Pegasus.net/XCAPS/Rocket
An obvious addition to the X-Corps Assault Platforms (XCAP) complement of weapons was the adaptation of a portable rocket launcher. With the destructive capabilities of eight High-Explosive Rockets added to the speed and maneuverability of the XCAP, the new model is a very valuable asset on the battlefield. Based on the Cannon XCAPs sensor equipment, which was reprogrammed to perform a limited missile guidance setting a precise launching vector, the T-02M also known as Rocket XCAP is capable of firing its high explosive STS Rockets with high accuracy in a 45 degree operation angle without moving the base. Keeping in mind the rockets large blast radius it is deadly to enemy ground troops positioned in loose groups even when not hitting the target wit full precision, and a serious threat to other armored vehicles. The automatic reload mechanism permits a fully remote controlled operation leaving the troops with much more than just a mobile heavy weapon system.
Although the parabolic rocket jet deflector allows the Rocket XCAP to retain launch capability in tight quarters, dispersing the exhaust blast so effectively that soldiers standing behind or in the vicinity of the launching rocket remain unharmed, it is not recommended for in-building use since the danger of casualties from the rockets' explosions should not be underestimated. When fighting in open terrain this weapon system has all arguments on its side.
The Rocket XCAP is a desperately needed heavy support system for our troops, freeing the soldiers of the burden a man-carried rocket launcher imposes them with.


“…how I learned to stop worrying and love the XCAP"
Sticker on X-Corps armor


Keep smiling while dying

Of course I have gone mad with power! It would be completely ridiculous to go mad without power!
And no, this is not a quote from the Simpson's movie, I want it on paper, that I actually wrote that quite some time before the movie came out.

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Posted 03 December 2006 - 09:29 PM

Ok, I made some changes to the text. Don't know if this is beyond a proofreading, but it needed some help.

XCAP, ROCKET
X-Net://Pegasus.net/XCAPS/Rocket

An obvious addition to the X-Corps Assault Platforms (XCAP) complement of weapons was the adaptation of a portable rocket launcher. With the destructive capabilities of eight High-Explosive Rockets added to the speed and maneuverability of the XCAP, the new model is a very valuable asset on the battlefield. Based on the Cannon XCAPs sensor equipment, which was reprogrammed to perform a limited missile guidance setting a precise launching vector, the MTC T-02M also known as Rocket XCAP is capable of firing its high explosive STS Rockets with high accuracy in a 45 degree operation angle without moving the base. Keeping in mind The rockets large blast radius makes is it deadly to enemy ground troops positioned in loose groups even when not hitting the target with full precision, and is a serious threat to other armored vehicles as well. The automatic reload mechanism permits a fully remote controlled operation leaving the troops with much more than just a mobile heavy weapon system.

Although the parabolic rocket jet deflector allows the Rocket XCAP to retain launch capability in tight quarters, dispersing the exhaust blast so effectively that soldiers standing behind or in the vicinity of the launching rocket remain unharmed, it is not recommended for in-building use since the danger of casualties from the rockets' explosions should not be underestimated is possible. When fighting in open terrain this weapon system has all arguments on its side.

The Rocket XCAP is a desperately needed heavy support system for our troops, freeing the soldiers of the burden a man-carried rocket launcher imposes them with.

“…how I learned to stop worrying and love the XCAP"
Sticker on X-Corps armor

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Posted 04 December 2006 - 06:14 AM

Ok, I made some changes to the text. Don't know if this is beyond a proofreading, but it needed some help.

no problem. let's have a look

XCAP, ROCKET
X-Net://Pegasus.net/XCAPS/Rocket

An obvious addition to the X-Corps Assault Platforms (XCAP) complement of weapons was the adaptation of a portable rocket launcher. With the destructive capabilities of eight High-Explosive Rockets added to the speed and maneuverability of the XCAP, the new model is a valuable asset on the battlefield. Based on the Cannon XCAPs sensor equipment, which was reprogrammed to perform a limited missile guidance setting a precise launching vector, the MTC T-02M also known as Rocket XCAP is capable of firing its high explosive STS Rockets with high accuracy in a 45 degree operation angle without moving the base. The rockets large blast radius makes it deadly to enemy ground troops positioned in loose groups even when not hitting the target with full precision, and is a serious threat to other armored vehicles as well. The automatic reload mechanism permits a fully remote controlled operation leaving the troops with much more than just a mobile heavy weapon system.

Although the parabolic rocket jet deflector allows the Rocket XCAP to retain launch capability in tight quarters, dispersing the exhaust blast so effectively that soldiers standing behind or in the vicinity of the launching rocket remain unharmed, it is not recommended for in-building use since the danger of casualties from the rockets' explosions should not be underestimated is possible I prefer my version. . When fighting in open terrain this weapon system has all arguments on its side.

The Rocket XCAP is a desperately needed heavy support system for our troops, freeing the soldiers of the burden a rocket launcher imposes them with.

“…how I learned to stop worrying and love the XCAP"
Sticker on X-Corps armor


Most of your changes I agree with. however, in the last § I prefer the previos version. Why did you want to change it?

Edited by Mad, 04 December 2006 - 06:14 AM.

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Posted 04 December 2006 - 10:02 PM

Most of your changes I agree with. however, in the last § I prefer the previous version. Why did you want to change it?

Not sure. Part of the problem is that the sentence is confusing since it is so long. Perhaps cutting it into two might be benficial? I think the main reason why I changed the last part of that sentence was because it contained a double negative. It also didn't sound right to me. :(

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Posted 05 December 2006 - 02:37 AM

Most of your changes I agree with. however, in the last § I prefer the previous version. Why did you want to change it?

Not sure. Part of the problem is that the sentence is confusing since it is so long. Perhaps cutting it into two might be benficial? I think the main reason why I changed the last part of that sentence was because it contained a double negative. It also didn't sound right to me. :(

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Hm. I see. The double negative I don't see a problem with, but the sentence is pretty long. Any ideas how to cut it?
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Posted 05 December 2006 - 11:30 AM

Sure, how about something like this:

Although the parabolic rocket jet deflector allows the Rocket XCAP to retain launch capability in tight quarters, it is not recommended for in-building use since the danger of casualties from the rockets' explosions should not be underestimated. The dispersal of the exhaust blast is so effective that soldiers standing behind or in the vicinity of the launching rocket remain unharmed.

This is just breaking apart the sentence into two parts. If you don't mind a little reordering and rewording, we could make things even more clear.

Although the Rocket XCAP retains launch capability in tight quarters, it is not recommended for in-building use since the danger of casualties from the rockets' explosions should not be underestimated. The parabolic rocket jet deflector disperses the exhaust blast so effectively that soldiers standing behind or in the vicinity of the launching rocket remain unharmed.

Are you ok with this? :)

I still think the "should not be underestimated" part doesn't read right and needs to be replaced. However, I'm not going to continue beating a dead horse if you think it is fine. A second opinion from kafros perhaps? =b

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Posted 05 December 2006 - 12:47 PM

Sure, how about something like this:

Although the parabolic rocket jet deflector allows the Rocket XCAP to retain launch capability in tight quarters, it is not recommended for in-building use since the danger of casualties from the rockets' explosions should not be underestimated. The dispersal of the exhaust blast is so effective that soldiers standing behind or in the vicinity of the launching rocket remain unharmed.

This is just breaking apart the sentence into two parts. If you don't mind a little reordering and rewording, we could make things even more clear.

Although the Rocket XCAP retains launch capability in tight quarters, it is not recommended for in-building use since the danger of casualties from the rockets' explosions should not be underestimated. The parabolic rocket jet deflector disperses the exhaust blast so effectively that soldiers standing behind or in the vicinity of the launching rocket remain unharmed.

Are you ok with this? :)

I still think the "should not be underestimated" part doesn't read right and needs to be replaced. However, I'm not going to continue beating a dead horse if you think it is fine. A second opinion from kafros perhaps? =b

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Nice! Hm. I would prefer the first version. Waiting for kafros opinion on the "should not be underestimated..."
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Posted 05 December 2006 - 02:19 PM

"...the danger...is possible" doesn't sound good :(
In addition, the previous sentence was too long and "should not be underestimated" didn't fit either. If the sentence is cut in 2 it's perfect imho.

Zombie's proposed version was good, but it had a problem... the sentences were in REVERSE order. I think this works best:

The parabolic rocket jet deflector disperses the exhaust blast so effectively that soldiers standing behind or in the vicinity of the launching rocket remain unharmed. Although the Rocket XCAP retains launch capability in tight quarters, it is not recommended for in-building use, as the danger of casualties from the rockets' explosions should not be underestimated.

my 2 cents

Edited by kafros, 05 December 2006 - 02:20 PM.


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Posted 05 December 2006 - 03:18 PM

Hm. I don't know. I still prefer Zombies first version. let's stick with that one. It's more compleicated, granted, but actually I think that's where it's beauty lies... :) So if there are no massive objections the CT now sounds like this:

XCAP, ROCKET
X-Net://Pegasus.net/XCAPS/Rocket

An obvious addition to the X-Corps Assault Platforms (XCAP) complement of weapons was the adaptation of a portable rocket launcher. With the destructive capabilities of eight High-Explosive Rockets added to the speed and maneuverability of the XCAP, the new model is a valuable asset on the battlefield. Based on the Cannon XCAPs sensor equipment, which was reprogrammed to perform a limited missile guidance setting a precise launching vector, the MTC T-02M also known as Rocket XCAP is capable of firing its high explosive STS Rockets with high accuracy in a 45 degree operation angle without moving the base. The rockets large blast radius makes it deadly to enemy ground troops positioned in loose groups even when not hitting the target with full precision, and is a serious threat to other armored vehicles as well. The automatic reload mechanism permits a fully remote controlled operation leaving the troops with much more than just a mobile heavy weapon system.

Although the parabolic rocket jet deflector allows the Rocket XCAP to retain launch capability in tight quarters, it is not recommended for in-building use since the danger of casualties from the rockets' explosions should not be underestimated. The dispersal of the exhaust blast is so effective that soldiers standing behind or in the vicinity of the launching rocket remain unharmed. When fighting in open terrain this weapon system has all arguments on its side.

The Rocket XCAP is a desperately needed heavy support system for our troops, freeing the soldiers of the burden a rocket launcher imposes them with.

“…how I learned to stop worrying and love the XCAP"
Sticker on X-Corps armor

so, any more comments?
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Posted 05 December 2006 - 03:36 PM

None by me. Two thumbs up on this one =b =b, so let's call this fin. :)

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Posted 05 December 2006 - 03:41 PM

None by me. Two thumbs up on this one =b =b, so let's call this fin. :)

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Ok. done and completed
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